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One Nine and Sixteen - the Attic


The Attic


Sewing machine, long idle, gathered dust
     in this old attic of dear grandma's home.
So dark, a lighted candle is a must;
     here in this place, I feel so all alone.

I come across sweet Grandma's wedding gown
     inside a wooden trunk, with photos too.
They look so young...I feel a tear roll down
     to see the happiness that they once knew.

The war years seemed like only yesterday
     to Gramps, who left this earth three years ago.
And here I find his medals on display...
     the combat gear he wore is stacked below.

And now they are together...Grandma passed
     five days ago...was buried near their park.
Now I, my precious memories, hold fast...
     the candle sputtered, spent, and all was dark.


Sandra M. Haight

~4th Place~
Contest: One Nine and Sixteen
Sponsor: Viv Wigley
Judged: 09/02/2018

Rules: Write a sixteen line poem, using the three lines below.

Line 1    'Sewing machine, long idle, gathered dust'
Line 9    'The war years seemed like only yesterday'
Line 16  'The candle sputtered, spent, and all was dark'
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Rodrigues Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 10:38 PM
Lovely! Congrats, Sandra!
Haight Avatar
May 4, 2018 at 8:59 AM
Thank you so much, Kim! Hugs, Sandra
Sinha-Roy Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 1:39 AM
Congratulations on your great win, Sandra. Great poem.
Haight Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 1:08 PM
Thank you, Subimal! Much appreciated. Hugs, Sandra
George   Avatar
May 2, 2018 at 8:57 PM
Great story, Sandra. Many congrats on your win. Elaine
Haight Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 1:08 PM
Thank you so much, Elaine! I appreciate your visit and uplifting comments. Hugs, Sandra
Johnson Avatar
May 2, 2018 at 3:09 PM
This should have been up there at the top. These are all so well written. It must have been a terrible job to judge them. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
Haight Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 1:07 PM
Thank you very much, Joyce, for your visit and very supportive comment and congratulations. Yes, there were many lovely poems. Love and Hugs, Sandra
Roper Avatar
May 2, 2018 at 12:02 PM
Sandra, congratulations on this wonderful heartfelt verse. I love that everyone has a different image of the 3 sentences.
Haight Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 1:06 PM
Thank you, Eve. Yes, it is amazing how many lovely poems were created! Hugs, Sandra
Allison Avatar
May 2, 2018 at 11:56 AM
Many congratulations on your win in the contest Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx
Haight Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 1:05 PM
Thank you, Jan. Much appreciated. Hugs, Sandra
Gentry Avatar
May 2, 2018 at 10:23 AM
Sandra this perfect. Congratulations on your win. Thoroughly enjoyed.
Haight Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 1:05 PM
Thank you very much, Susan. Hugs, Sandra
Gauthier Avatar
May 2, 2018 at 6:09 AM
Back with well deserved congrats, Sandra.
Haight Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 1:04 PM
Thank you so much, Line. Hugs, Sandra
May Avatar
April 16, 2018 at 9:29 PM
Very nicely penned Sandra...Best wishes
Haight Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 4:54 PM
Thank you very much, Joseph, for your visit and uplifting comments. Sandra
Gauthier Avatar
April 15, 2018 at 10:18 AM
Wow, Sandra. You were truly inspired for this beauty. Amazing imagery.
Haight Avatar
April 16, 2018 at 4:25 PM
Thank you so much, Line! Much appreciated. Hugs, Sandra
Allison Avatar
April 15, 2018 at 9:55 AM
Such wonderful but memories Sandra and the picture is perfect for your poem. I too went with a similar idea of the attic as Viv's lines give rise to such a melancholy poems. good luck with the contest- hugs jan xx
Haight Avatar
April 16, 2018 at 4:25 PM
Thank, Jan. Yes, those lines invite melancholy for sure. Thanks for your visit and uplifting comments. Hugs, Sandra
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