Susan Ashley Poet Rhyme

One Minute Till Sunset

Damned frangipani streams of misery
do ripple his heartstrings with injury.
Menagerie of scented memories
infuse his mood with lost love reveries.

Luscious sepals once had held his heart,
her early twilight darkness did impart,
mute mockingbirds in grief no longer sing,
sunset is bleeding last vermilion fling.

Ancestral home on blissful breeze he flies
pellucid prayers and soul ascend pearl skies.


Susan Ashley
January 7, 2018


~ Third Place ~
Contest: Best Rhyming Poem 2018
Sponsor: John Hamilton


~ First Place~
Contest: 10 Words and 10 Lines Challenge
Sponsor: Silent One

*Required words; menagerie, vermilion, infuse, mockingbirds, twilight,
 frangipani, luscious, pellucid, ancestral, ripples*

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John Michaels November 15, 2018 at 11:31 AM Such wonderful imagery and carefully-crafted phraseology! You've done a masterful job, Susan! Kind regards, John. Susan Ashley November 15, 2018 at 4:13 PM John, your generous and lovely appraisal of my poem thrills me to no end. Thank you for your kindness and I’m so glad you enjoyed it! Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Funom Makama April 28, 2018 at 8:10 AM This is lovely and incredible. Your pen overflow with creativity and wisdom. Wishing to read more of your works... Susan Ashley April 28, 2018 at 1:06 PM Thank you Funom for the wonderful pleasure of your visit and for the kindness of your lovely comments. I'm honored and humbled by your heartwarming praise. Warmest wishes to you always, my friend.. ~Susan

Judith S February 27, 2018 at 1:09 PM Ah yes ... I remember this one well! Back yet again with more Congrats on your additional win here my dear NE friend :) ~Judy Susan Ashley February 27, 2018 at 3:54 PM Thank you dear Judy for your kindhearted return. Your wonderful congrats mean the world to me. I hope all is well with you in your neck of NE.. :)) Warmest wishes my lovely friend! ~Susan

Line Gauthier February 24, 2018 at 4:39 PM Back again with deserved congrats, Susan. Awesome. Susan Ashley February 24, 2018 at 5:44 PM Thank you Line for the twice-as-nice pleasure of your return visit and your kindhearted congrats. ~Susan

Connie Marcum Wong February 24, 2018 at 2:50 PM I am so happy to reread this beauty again Susan. Congratulations on your well-deserved placement! : ) Susan Ashley February 24, 2018 at 5:46 PM Connie, thank you for your return visit. I relish your wonderful comments and kindhearted congrats. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

John Hamilton February 24, 2018 at 1:48 PM Great rhymes Susan, always see you at the top, hope you don't get bored with winning! Thanks for this lush entry! Susan Ashley February 24, 2018 at 5:50 PM John, your lovely sentiments are deeply appreciated. Thank you for the honor of my placement in your contest. I'm proud to be among such talented poets/poetesses. I never get bored with artistic expression, whether it's mine or another's :)) Thank you John, for hosting a fantastic contest.. ~Susan

Chris Hagy January 20, 2018 at 9:12 PM Wow! You certainly blew this challenge away! Amazing write :) Susan Ashley January 20, 2018 at 10:10 PM Chris, your visit is wonderful, thank you so much for your beautiful comments. Your kind words are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Probir Gupta January 20, 2018 at 9:43 AM Lovely 'one minute till sunset', Susan ... the flow , the rhyme and the whole poetic idea are very pleasant ... Congratulations on your fine win ... Susan Ashley January 20, 2018 at 10:09 PM Thank you dear Probir, for the delight of your visit and your beautiful comments. Your heartwarming congrats and kind words are endearing and are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Anisha Dutta January 18, 2018 at 11:32 PM So sweet,so nice. Congrats. Love Susan Ashley January 19, 2018 at 8:20 PM Thank you Anisha for your lovely comments and kindhearted congrats. Hugs, love and warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Richard Lamoureux January 18, 2018 at 7:12 PM I see as well that congratulations are in order. Susan Ashley January 18, 2018 at 8:58 PM Thank you Richard for your heartwarming congrats as well, I hold your kind words in deep appreciation my friend.. ~Susan

Richard Lamoureux January 18, 2018 at 7:12 PM My pleasure Susan, in fact I enjoyed giving it another read. Susan Ashley January 18, 2018 at 8:55 PM Richard, it's always such a pleasure when you visit. Thank you for stopping by for another read, it pleases me to no end to know that you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes to you.. ~Susan

Kim Rodrigues January 17, 2018 at 8:06 AM mute mockingbirds in grief no longer sing...excellent imagery! Congrats! Susan Ashley January 18, 2018 at 7:41 PM Kim, thank you so much for your wonderful comments and your kindhearted congrats. I'm pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Connie Marcum Wong January 17, 2018 at 12:05 AM Back to congratulate you on your wonderful first placement Susan. It is so deserving! : ) Susan Ashley January 18, 2018 at 7:38 PM Connie, thank you for your lovely comments and your heartwarming congrats. Your encouragement and support is truly appreciated my friend.. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Paul Callus January 16, 2018 at 12:19 PM So pleased to be back with congratulations, Susan! I had no doubts that this entry would fly high! ~ Warm regards // paul Susan Ashley January 16, 2018 at 10:28 PM Thank you Paul for believing in my poem and making a return visit with your lovely sentiments and kind congrats :) Your beautiful comments I hold in appreciation always my friend. Warmest wishes ~Susan P.S. please check my new reply to your reply on 'Quiche Lorraine'..

Cheryl Hoffman January 15, 2018 at 9:50 PM Congratulations on an awesome write Susan!!~Che :) Susan Ashley January 15, 2018 at 10:30 PM Thank you, Cheryl for your wonderful comments and your heartwarming congrats. Your kind sentiments I truly relish. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Janice Canerdy January 15, 2018 at 9:43 PM Congratulations on your top win with this fabulous piece, Susan! Janice Susan Ashley January 15, 2018 at 10:31 PM Thank you Janice for your lovely comments and kindhearted congrats.. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Maria Williams January 13, 2018 at 11:33 PM Just amazing Susan, I can see why this brilliant poem won first place. Congratulations my dear friend, bask in the limelight, you deserve it, the honor is all yours. Love and hugs....Maria Susan Ashley January 14, 2018 at 7:40 PM Thank you my dear friend Maria, for your glowing words. I so appreciate your lovely sentiments and your heartwarming congrats. Your light of kindness is an inspiration to me, my sweet friend. Warmest wishes, love and hugs.. ~Susan

Harry Horsman January 13, 2018 at 5:12 PM oh wonderful, a truly deserved winner, congratulations Susan Ashley January 13, 2018 at 9:41 PM Hi Harry, your endearing sentiments are truly appreciated. Thank you so much for the delight of your visit and your heartwarming comments. It pleases me to no end to know you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Jack Horne January 13, 2018 at 2:14 PM wow, what a tough challenge & what a great poem you wrote for it. So glad to see you got 1st place for this x Susan Ashley January 13, 2018 at 9:37 PM Hi Jack, your wonderful sentiments are deeply appreciated. Thank you so much for the delight of your visit and your heartwarming comments. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes my friend. ~Susan

Akkina Downing January 12, 2018 at 9:46 PM I knew it!! :) Yey, congratulations my awesome lady friend on your amazing win... so amazing! It's because it's got sizzles ;) Susan Ashley January 12, 2018 at 9:56 PM You got sizzles and sparkles my effervescent friend ;)) Thank you my awesome friend for your lovely face and wonderful comments that grace my poetry page. Your heartfelt sentiments and warmhearted congrats are truly appreciated my dear Kina. Your light of kindness shines on me and I smile :)))) Hugs, more smiles and lotsa sizzle lol!! ~Su

Alesia Leach January 12, 2018 at 7:47 PM Congrats on your win beautiful superb imagery loved reading Susan Ashley January 12, 2018 at 7:56 PM Hi Alesia, how are you my friend? It's so nice to see you.. Your wonderful comments and your kind congrats are heartwarming and are truly appreciated. Thank you for stopping by and sharing your lovely thoughts with me. Warmest wishes to you. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich January 12, 2018 at 7:17 PM wow, you did an amazing job. Congrats on this number one win. Susan Ashley January 12, 2018 at 7:52 PM Thank you Andrea, for the 'wow' :)) your wonderful sentiments and your heartwarming congrats.. Warmest wishes my friend ~Susan

Roy Pett January 12, 2018 at 1:34 PM Congratulations on your well deserved win with this amazing poem Susan, absolutely brilliant. :)) Susan Ashley January 12, 2018 at 4:39 PM Thank you, Roy for your beautiful comments and heartwarming congrats. Your friendship is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Gary Smith January 12, 2018 at 11:26 AM Excellent Susan, congrats :) Susan Ashley January 12, 2018 at 4:40 PM Gary, your kind comments and congrats are heartwarming. Thank you my friend. ~Susan

CayCay Godwin January 12, 2018 at 9:47 AM After I read this, I had to check your placement because it JUST HAD to be a #1 spot - this is poetry beauty and I know because it chilled me. It flows in a way that truly excites me and lifts me as I read. Way to go! Hugs ... CayCay Susan Ashley January 12, 2018 at 6:22 PM CayCay, your beautiful comments expressing your appreciation for my poem both thrills and touches my heart in such a lovely way. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for extending your halo of light and kindness around me.. Warmest wishes my dear friend ~Susan

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