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One Gray Hair

Her wrinkles were joy-flecked twinkled
with facial lines brightly smile crunched.
Her eye shade vague, but love sprinkled
from decades of holding faith bunched.
She prayed steady,
her praise ready.

Her giggle rendered me tickled.
Her heart-ways raised me cherish-touched.
Loving my Gram much, tears trickled
the morning I found her death clutched.
Not one gray hair
lacked my despair.


... CayCay
March 10, 2018

feelingsgrandmothergriefloverhyme

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Line Gauthier

January 8, 2019 at 10:21 PM

Lovely, CayCay. Congrats on your top win.

CayCay Godwin

January 11, 2019 at 5:07 AM

Thank you, Line! CayCay

Edward Ibeh

January 8, 2019 at 5:10 PM

Oh, I love this, CayCay:-) Beautifully composed, too! Congratulations on your win!

CayCay Godwin

January 11, 2019 at 5:09 AM

Thank you so much, Edward - I enjoyed your comments. Appreciation ... CayCay

Connie Marcum Wong

January 8, 2019 at 1:38 PM

Wow Caycay...this is so beautiful. I am so happy to see it on Brian's winning list! Your ending lines are so impactful! Congratulations! Have a great week. : ) xxoo

John Gondolf

January 8, 2019 at 9:41 AM

CayCay, a touching tribute to your Grandmother. Congrats for your win in Brian's contest. Al my best. John

Vladislav Raven

November 12, 2018 at 2:38 PM

Hi Cay Cay, dropping by with my congratulations on your win with this much deserved Have a wonderful Monday. Hugs....Mike. XX

Alycia Wheatley

November 10, 2018 at 2:06 PM

Congrats!

Kai Michael Neumann

March 29, 2018 at 2:09 AM

What a tribute...

Connie Marcum Wong

March 13, 2018 at 3:01 AM

I will try to see where this placed CayCay. It is really a lovely tribute to your Gram. Congratulations on your win! xxoo

Connie Marcum Wong

November 5, 2018 at 2:42 PM

Yay! First place in Brian's contest! Congratulations my dear friend! I hope you are having fun at the wedding! xxoo : )

Sandra Haight

March 12, 2018 at 11:10 AM

Beautifully written and a wonderful tribute to your dear Gram, CayCay. Congratulations on your placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Richard Lamoureux

March 12, 2018 at 8:32 AM

It’s so great when women own their beauty. This was a pleasure to read. I see by reading the comments that you won with this gem. Congrats on a well deserved win.

Constance La France

March 12, 2018 at 8:21 AM

CayCay congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautiful write. I loved my grandma too !

Subimal Sinha-Roy

March 12, 2018 at 1:28 AM

Congratulations, CayCay on your win.

Line Gauthier

March 11, 2018 at 7:50 PM

Great poem. Congrats on your win, CayCay.

Rhoda Tripp

March 11, 2018 at 7:17 PM

I so love the way you use unique word combinations..."smile crunched"...It's like you can take two words, slap them together and I can immediately envision those words in a tryst. So cool!

Andrea Dietrich

March 11, 2018 at 5:33 PM

So glad to see this on the winners' list. You chose same theme as I did. I love your rendition of One Grey Hair, Caycay. You took it to a personal level. I wish I'd had a grandma I looked up to this way!

Caren Krutsinger

March 11, 2018 at 4:26 AM

I don't think you could ever lose her, or she you. I imagine she was praying for you every day until her last. The phrase joy-flecked twinkled delighted me, and the ending expresses what we have all felt when those we love well pass over. A profound cheery/sad poem.

Susan Ashley

March 10, 2018 at 5:42 PM

Such a gorgeous and heartfelt poem CayCay. So expressive of soulful emotions of love and appreciation. Beautifully poetic throughout, I especially loved your two final lines. A riveting reminisce of your beloved Gram. Best wishes for a win my friend.. Warmest wishes and hugs. ~Susan

CayCay Godwin

March 10, 2018 at 7:56 PM

Thank you, Susan. Laura Loo and Broken Wings can serve up some fun challenges! I appreciate your presence and talents and kindness and .... CayCay

Jan Allison

March 10, 2018 at 3:14 PM

aww CayCay what a lovely tribute i wish id had a grandma:-) hugs Jan xx

CayCay Godwin

March 10, 2018 at 3:47 PM

The ending is fictional because although I loved her dearly and called her Gram, she was my husband's grandmother. I loved her before we married, lived with her for a year when we first married, then years later I lost her in our eventual divorce. I have never stopped missing her or giving thanks for the countless ways she impacted me and my journey. I learned a few years ago that she had lived until 103. I've never known anyone as constantly close to God as she was in every moment. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Charlie Smith

March 10, 2018 at 11:13 AM

Lovely work CayCay, best wishes in the contest...

CayCay Godwin

March 10, 2018 at 3:48 PM

Thank you, you bearded wonder of a poet donning my favorite style of hat. Had to say that. All the best ... CayCay

Eve Roper

March 10, 2018 at 10:48 AM

CayCay, love the flow, perfect rhyme, and the theme is great... Getting old is hell my opinion .. I think it's just different with each individual .. luck in the contest... Hugs Eve ~`*

CayCay Godwin

March 10, 2018 at 3:52 PM

The body betrays, the mirror frightens, but the inner-self stays the same age and hopefully helps you develop a sense of humor, I know laughter, plus a lack of analyzing, sure helps me. Where as I once made up my face, I laugh that I now seem to spend that time erasing it! Hugs ... CayCay

Jack Horne

March 10, 2018 at 10:15 AM

a lovely tribute to a lovely lady

CayCay Godwin

March 10, 2018 at 3:53 PM

Thank you, sir - good to have your comment. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Paul Callus

March 10, 2018 at 8:49 AM

You and your grandmother definitely had a close and loving relationship, CayCay. Although she passed away, I am sure there are many beautiful memories to hold on to. ~ Regards // paul

CayCay Godwin

March 10, 2018 at 9:06 AM

Truth to tell, all lines are about my first husband's Gram whom I loved very much, the last 4 are made up because I lost her in the divorce, but do know she lived to be 103 and she was absolutely pivotal in my spiritual journey. Love her, I did. Thanks, Paul ... CayCay

Daniel Turner

March 10, 2018 at 7:47 AM

I spent a lot of time with both of my grandmothers and I loved every minute of it. I do miss them so. Your lovely poem reminded me how much. Good luck sweetie.

CayCay Godwin

March 10, 2018 at 9:13 AM

Nothing like the soft love of a grandmother. I visit mine in my mind/heart quite often, too, remember them easier than what I ate last night. Glad I took you on a sentimental journey. Sent u a soup mail. Love ... CayCay

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