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10/8/2025 for One Couple of Days Poetry Contest sponsored by Charles Messina

Premiere Contest WinnerOne Fine Fish Story-OBD

One couple of days, by the deep orange sea, 
a sober drunk sailor met a chaste mermaid with two legs and a fee.
Nine months later, at the ripe age of eight,
I was born right on time, though I was quite late.
My dear mother knew how to raise this orphan boy right - 
I was a pacifist and always got in a fight. 
Dropping out of school on a Harvard scholarship, 
I stayed at home smoking as I went on a trip.
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Rodrigues Avatar
November 1, 2025 at 2:23 PM
Congratulations, David!
Crandall Avatar
November 3, 2025 at 6:33 PM
Thanks, Kim!
James Avatar
October 30, 2025 at 2:21 PM
Congratulations on your top win David. Well deserved. Emilia : ) PS. still waiting on that smoking soupmail lol ; )
Crandall Avatar
November 3, 2025 at 6:32 PM
Thanks, Emilia. haha, I just don't want to disappoint you.
Miller Avatar
October 30, 2025 at 2:51 AM
Good one David, made me laugh, congratulations
Crandall Avatar
October 30, 2025 at 5:31 AM
Thanks, Terry, glad you got a laugh!
Dietrich Avatar
October 29, 2025 at 12:13 PM
Ahh I see how this took the trophy. Big congrats. Awesome mermaid tale . Love that last line
Crandall Avatar
October 30, 2025 at 5:31 AM
Aw, thanks Andrea!
Jones Avatar
October 29, 2025 at 7:48 AM
lol! Congrats on top win David!
Crandall Avatar
October 29, 2025 at 9:46 AM
Thanks, Karen!
Messina Avatar
October 29, 2025 at 5:20 AM
This really made me laugh, David. Congratulations on your bottom win at the top of the podium!
Crandall Avatar
October 29, 2025 at 5:46 AM
Wow, what an honor! and I'm glad you got a laugh out of it. I also enjoyed writing it in your humble, grand contest!
James Avatar
October 16, 2025 at 10:57 AM
I like how your mind thinks, what yer smoking, soupmail me lol. A strong contender I reckon. Enjoyed..alot. Emilia : )
Crandall Avatar
October 16, 2025 at 11:19 AM
haha, thanks, glad you enjoyed it Emilia!
Etgen-Baker Avatar
October 9, 2025 at 5:38 PM
outstanding imagery and engaging story....a true contest contender!
Crandall Avatar
October 9, 2025 at 7:02 PM
Thanks, Sara!
Wolf Avatar
October 8, 2025 at 8:34 PM
Aw, you wrote this on porpoise, David.
Crandall Avatar
October 9, 2025 at 7:02 PM
:-))
Rodrigues Avatar
October 8, 2025 at 6:37 PM
Deep orange sea, sober drunk sailor, a chaste mermaid…lol
Crandall Avatar
October 9, 2025 at 6:59 PM
haha :-))
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