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One Day Soon

The night still young at seven, leaving a warm afterglow that makes the still sea a mellow yellow~ mirroring your splendour as I take a look once more at the traces of our tryst. Your smile is etched upon the silhouettes of seabirds taking flight. Your voice is whispered by the east wind like the way you did when you uttered, "I love you". Your arms I feel in the burnt umber clouds embosoming mountain crest. Alas, the night is now old at eleven but the star-studded sky exudes a harlequin hope that there will be~ "Time For Us" One day soon! 22 August 2020 1st place STRAND COMPLETELY NEW (26) ,any form,any theme Contest Judged: 8/23/2020 Sponsored by: Brian Strand

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Date: 8/30/2020 4:14:00 AM
More good work from your capable pen, J.C. Enjoyed! :) john
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Date: 8/25/2020 10:16:00 PM
JCB, I like how you walk us through the night from 'young' to 'old', the gentle ache of longing and the delicate alliterations: still/sea, traces/tryst, silhouettes/seabirds, harlequin/hope. So much to love, easy to see why you earned a #1 win with Brian. Well done, looking forward to more ~ John
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Date: 8/25/2020 2:53:00 PM
wow, a time for us worked super well for you in this contest. Fantastic work!! Congrats.
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Date: 8/24/2020 10:38:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Time goes by so fast. A wonderful story/poem. Enjoy your win and day...............
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Date: 8/23/2020 2:02:00 PM
So romantic, especially 'etched/silhouettes' lines, best wishes for the contest.
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Date: 8/23/2020 9:29:00 AM
Love the phrase “harlequin hope.” Fun! The first verse truly set a good mood.
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Date: 8/23/2020 5:52:00 AM
WOW, JCB, you just wowed me! Such a great poem - love every word, every line. And the ending! enchantingly Dramatic! To my Fave. Love, Mala
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Date: 8/23/2020 5:40:00 AM
I like the tender glimpses of love in your write--and the turn in your poems towards the end. So well done!
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Date: 8/23/2020 4:58:00 AM
Beautiful and inspiring, like a sweet embrace caressing the heart. God bless you sweet friend.
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