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Check out my form at this link and try to write a 7/5 Trochee quatrain. Usually they work better for humor.

http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/75trochee.html

One day looking at the sky (though I don’t know why), standing in my underwear, what did I descry? There were piglets in my yard! Do you think I lie? Pink, with wings! They took off up into the sky! All the times I heard it said Yeah, when pigs can fly! How I wished for a witness that could testify! But nobody was around - not that I could spy. I grew tired and then lay down with a weary sigh. That strange sight which I had seen I could not deny till I woke, my head pounding so bad I could cry. With my senses coming back, I guessed by and by, It was me (and not pink pigs) that was flying high! Written May 13, 2017 in 7/5 Trochee Form for the Descry Poetry Contest of Rob Carmack

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Date: 6/21/2017 1:02:00 AM
A hug, a congrats and a thank you for supporting my contest.
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Date: 5/22/2017 7:18:00 AM
Such a cute story with humorous ending... Reads like a winner.. A big 7 for this beautiful piece Andrea... Loved it...
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Date: 5/18/2017 11:59:00 AM
Hahaha, Lovely write Andrea, and humorous too.
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Date: 5/17/2017 2:34:00 PM
- Lovely smile at the end, Andrea - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/17/2017 8:13:00 AM
What a shame, I really liked the thought of pink pigs with wings. Nice write, I smile broadly. Best of luck in the contest.
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Date: 5/17/2017 6:36:00 AM
I loved your ending Andrea. Wonderful humor that left a smile on my face. Best luck in the contest with your own sweet form. 7 ; )
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Date: 5/14/2017 4:25:00 PM
HI Andrea, loved the humour in this write. Good luck in the contest. I could do with some of those magic mushrooms. Have a good day. Hugs....Mike. XX Has to be a seven Andrea. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Date: 5/14/2017 10:38:00 AM
in the 60's we called that "trippin" humorous poem..good luck
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Date: 5/14/2017 10:17:00 AM
whatever you've been taking can i have some too lol - great humour Andrea:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 5/14/2017 8:31:00 AM
Love how you ended it Andrea..A lovely write
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Date: 5/14/2017 3:28:00 AM
Joyful and whimsical - enjoyed it muchly! ;-)
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Date: 5/13/2017 10:04:00 PM
It sounds better than falling down a rabbit hole:) I warned you about those mushrooms:) Very cute, Andrea.
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Date: 5/13/2017 7:37:00 PM
So cute and funny, liked this!!!
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Date: 5/13/2017 7:36:00 PM
Someone spiked your tea...lol
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