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Written: January 04, 2024 _______________________________________ Magnificent orchids are being flourished on this land. Love lyrics serenaded for odd lovers of this land. The whirlwind carried the rest of my nest fodder away. A wingless bird's exclusive abode is in a wrecked land. Beyond the grapple of men, two sisters knit at a loom. Each thread of their bright tapestry is woven on this land Lines head to be draped amid the admirable shadow. Many emboldened spirits had raised labels in this land. They process into the droves to explore the sacred halls. Discovering an understanding of love in this land! I've embraced the lovely planet I won't whine to the sky. I can grasp all of it, but I lost my skills in dreamland. Light a blaze in flatter for solace to a weary soul. Crones sat down at the embers with dignity in this land. The world is nebulous and my purpose never dwindled Life is bereft of motivation that sticks in this land Sadly, my unique resource of approval has been lost. People deceived me and misinformed me about my land. The spatial layer has taken on architect's labor. With no intention of standing unaided in this land. Despite how accurate my ear is for faraway chords. Watch over the trumpets superbly blasted in this land. I feel upset and have a strong desire to catch a nap. Why did I acquire it? How did all arise in this land?

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Date: 1/5/2024 2:31:00 PM
I'm not familiar with this form of poetry, but I can that writing it would be a creative challenge...yet yours flows effortlessly and with profundity! I especially liked: The world is nebulous and my purpose never dwindled...Life is bereft of motivation that sticks in this land. I appreciate your Sotto style and voice. Have a wonderful weekend, Sara
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Date: 1/5/2024 12:56:00 PM
Hi Sotto not style you often see but you convey it beautifully hugs Shadow
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Date: 1/5/2024 12:19:00 PM
Interesting lines penned. "Why did I acquire it?" So many times, we do purchase something then in a few months or years we do ponder that question. Sometimes we remember why and renew our original desire and with renewal go after that reason and sometimes decided to put it aside. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K
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Date: 1/5/2024 12:14:00 PM
I love this form and have written a few of them.. I am contemplating entering an old one in your contest, but will probably write a new one.. Your Ghazal weaves together rich imagery, metaphors, and emotions to explore the multifaceted nature of life, encompassing both beauty and challenges. The narrative unfolds with a mix of optimism, resilience, and contemplation, creating a textured and thought-provoking piece..
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Date: 1/5/2024 9:46:00 AM
Beautiful Ghazal in English. I have not seen many. Thanks for posting,
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Date: 1/5/2024 6:54:00 AM
Splendid write my friend--in this difficult to execute form. The second line of every couplet has a special tenor--just as intended. I felt the emotions throughout.
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Date: 1/5/2024 1:38:00 AM
I dont remember the last time I’ve written a ghazal. I just love how you’ve written yours . With such descriptive lines in sheer eloquence. So heartfelt and has a sincere voice that depicts exhaustion and regrets, in such a touching flow. I especially love “ The world is nebulous and my purpose never dwindled Life is bereft of motivation that sticks in this land” how profound and spot on is that. I think many can resonate with many lines in this. As sometimes we all feel these emotions too! FAVE
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