On the Fence

It would be wonderful if it were true
Battling preposterous pros and cons 
Tormenting entwining glances
How much longer can this go on

Battling preposterous pros and cons
If only you were older or I younger
How much longer can this go on
They say age shouldn’t matter

If only you were older or I younger
Tormenting entwining glances
They say age shouldn’t matter 
It would be wonderful if it were true



AP:  Honorable Mention 2020

Posted on March 23, 2018

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 3/27/2018 8:49:00 PM
Oh it was your most recent one. And posted on my mom's birthday. Let me read this.
Login to Reply
Gauthier Avatar
Line Gauthier
Date: 3/27/2018 11:07:00 PM
Thanks, Andrea.
Date: 3/23/2018 10:41:00 PM
your vocabulary always blows me away. Good luck in the contest, Line. I am now looking up Pantoum, because I need to know more.
Login to Reply
Gauthier Avatar
Line Gauthier
Date: 3/23/2018 11:43:00 PM
Thank you, Caren. Have fun!
Date: 3/23/2018 6:17:00 PM
My dear Line, you have mastered this form as reflected in this most amazing Pantoum! It is so wonderfully crafted with smooth transitions and thought connections - excellently conceptualized. I am sure this will be high on the winners' list! Best wishes and hugs. Pandita
Login to Reply
Gauthier Avatar
Line Gauthier
Date: 3/23/2018 11:44:00 PM
Thank you so much for your vote of confidence, Pandita. When are we going to see your contests?
Date: 3/23/2018 11:22:00 AM
A very good Pantoum, Line, in which you get the readers to think and participate. Age shouldn't matter, but I am sure that in certain things older people have an edge over younger ones:) Regards // paul
Login to Reply
Gauthier Avatar
Line Gauthier
Date: 3/23/2018 12:51:00 PM
Thanks for your lovely visit and comment, Paul.
Date: 3/23/2018 8:02:00 AM
You did well with this pantoum! GL in contest!
Login to Reply
Gauthier Avatar
Line Gauthier
Date: 3/23/2018 8:07:00 AM
Thanks, Kim. Much appreciated.
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Radiant Verses: A Journey Through Inspiring Poetry

Hide Ad