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On My Knees

Silently, a teardrop streaks And falls on her suitcase Quietly, I turn to see A broken heart, there on her face Patiently, she looks at me As if she needs to hear Anything, just anything... To make over...easier Finally, the silence speaks That dreaded word...goodbye Instantly, oh I can see Leaving...in her eyes Hopefully, the heart in me Is begging me to say Anything, just anything To make her want to stay I'm on my knees, just look at me My pride's thrown out the door A part of me, the heart of me Her final walk across the floor Her mind's made up, my words won't come I can't pretend that I don't care I'm on my knees, down on my knees But I haven't got a prayer I'm on my knees, still on my knees But I haven't got a prayer Written by Chuck Melugin

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John Hamilton

Date: 8/3/2017 11:29:00 AM

This lyric is sooo good Chuck, I just discovered your lyrics, I thought I was the only one, you definitely have a talent for songwriting, do you write the music too! I give this one an A for awesome!

Chuck Melugin
Date: 8/4/2017 11:47:00 AM

Thanks so very much, John. We have songwriting in common. I can't get away from it. Muse can be a pain in the butt or an Angel on the shoulder......kinda like life. My best to you, chuck

Vladislav Raven

Date: 5/25/2017 7:23:00 PM

Hi Chuck, another excellent Lyric my friend. The emotion in your words does touch the heart so easily. The words play on the readers heartstrings. One can easily picture the scene through your emotional words. A tear to fall as the end comes. Your words truly sing my friend. This has to be a seven and a fave Chuck. I love the cont of this piece. Your Friend always....Mike.

Chuck Melugin
Date: 5/25/2017 8:43:00 PM

Thanks so much Mike. I stand in awe of your review. Please accept my heartfelt appreciation for your kind words and most of all, for your friendship. My best to you and yours, chuck

Carole Duet

Date: 3/25/2017 5:32:00 PM

Hey Chuck! I read your reply and I see what you mean...i.e. not using 'leaving' twice. However, how about using the word, 'going', instead of 'over'? It just seems to me it would make more sense. Just my opinion though. It's still a great poem either way.

Chuck Melugin
Date: 3/26/2017 9:04:00 AM

Thank you Carole. I like "going". I also thought about, " to make heartbreak.....easier. What do you think?

D.W. Rodgers

Date: 3/22/2017 8:04:00 PM

This rings true, well sung.

Chuck Melugin
Date: 3/26/2017 8:58:00 AM

Thank you Dave, I sure appreciate it! My best to you, chuck

Carole Duet

Date: 3/18/2017 12:36:00 AM

This is really good, Chuck. I like it a lot but I have a suggestion: In the 2nd verse, last line...what about changing the word "over" to "leaving". It seems to me it would still be a great song with that small change. It's so sad and so many people could relate to it.

Chuck Melugin
Date: 3/18/2017 8:32:00 AM

Carole, Thanks so much for taking the time to comment. Your point is well taken. I had used "leaving" in the following stanza. Maybe it would work well in both. I so appreciate your input and wish you the best, chuck

Joanna Daniel

Date: 3/7/2017 8:54:00 AM

Touching lyric, Chuck:)

Chuck Melugin
Date: 3/7/2017 12:12:00 PM

Thanks, Jo. It is a lyric to a song I wrote several years ago. My best to you, chuck

John Herlihy

Date: 2/3/2017 3:15:00 AM

A very touching, heart-felt poem, yes, enough to bring one to one's knees. JH

Chuck Melugin
Date: 2/3/2017 8:31:00 AM

Thank You John. I appreciate those words. My best to you, chuck

Eve Roper

Date: 2/2/2017 10:04:00 AM

Beautiful lyric all I can say is WOW!

Chuck Melugin
Date: 2/2/2017 10:28:00 AM

Thanks so much Eve. Your comment is greatly appreciated! My best to you, chuck

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/27/2017 9:03:00 AM

The last sixth stanza and last two lines are so perfect and fraught with emotions. A perfect conclusion to a masterful write.

Chuck Melugin
Date: 1/27/2017 11:37:00 AM

Wow! Thanks so much Richard, Those words, coming from you just made my day!! My best to you, chuck

Akkina Downing

Date: 1/26/2017 11:14:00 AM

Silent teardrop for this deep heartfelt piece. Beautifully written, I love it...

Chuck Melugin
Date: 1/26/2017 12:26:00 PM

Thanks so much Akkina for the wonderful comment! My best to you. chuck

Paulette Calasibetta

Date: 1/23/2017 6:32:00 AM

Wow, Chuck, this is so moving, you've beautifully touched that place we all have been.....this should be a song! Beautiful!

Paulette Calasibetta

Date: 1/23/2017 6:32:00 AM

Wow, Chuck, this is so moving, you've beautifully touched that place we all have been.....this should be a song! Beautiful!

Chuck Melugin
Date: 1/24/2017 11:54:00 PM

Thanks Paulette, I appreciate your response, my best, chuck

Adeniji Toluwalope Gideon

Date: 1/23/2017 6:27:00 AM

Great emotional poem! Well crafted, Chuck.

Chuck Melugin
Date: 1/24/2017 11:52:00 PM

Thank you so much Adeniji. My best, chuck

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/21/2017 5:00:00 AM

When it's over, it's over. I can relate. Raw and real Chuck. Very moving! 7 ; )

Chuck Melugin
Date: 1/21/2017 8:25:00 AM

Thanks, Connie I so appreciate your comment my friend! Best to you, chuck

Paul Callus

Date: 1/20/2017 12:39:00 PM

These lovely, sad lyrical words are already worthy of a suitable prayer, Chuck. A final goodbye can be so painful! // paul

Chuck Melugin
Date: 1/20/2017 5:31:00 PM

Thanks Paul I appreciate your words. My best to you, chuck

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/19/2017 9:31:00 PM

very sad one. I love how you repeated the ending part. It really drives the point home!!

Chuck Melugin
Date: 1/19/2017 10:24:00 PM

Thanks very much, Andrea. My best to you. Chuck

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 1/19/2017 4:56:00 PM

Sentimentally powerful and beautiful dear, Chuck! Wonderfully written!

Chuck Melugin
Date: 1/19/2017 5:08:00 PM

Thank you Demetrios. I so appreciate your words. My best to you, Chuck

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/19/2017 1:59:00 PM

- A beautiful and touching poem, Chuck - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Chuck Melugin
Date: 1/19/2017 5:05:00 PM

Thanks so much Anne-Lise! Stay warm in Norway! My best to you. Chuck

Tim Smith

Date: 1/18/2017 5:44:00 PM

Excellent write Chuck...very smooth

Chuck Melugin
Date: 1/18/2017 8:16:00 PM

Thanks Tim Your comments are appreciated. Chuck