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On Graveyards Damp

Across the knoll where fading starlight hangs
On graveyards damp, laying on pleated  moss
While row of angels bears the gusty winds;
As evening spreads its thin veil on the ground .
My hands begin to trace each cross on the aisle
Revealing a child’s name, young bones interred
Within the deepened chamber of his tomb,
Enshrined in limestone white...like a pure dove .

That on this foggy glen, a mother kneels
Accompanied by evanescing stars…
Her lips pressed on crystals of prayer beads
Till musings are whispered to a lost son .
Embracing this woman’s grief, I rewind
All memories of my father, long gone;
Beside this crypt, there Dad quietly rests;
Maybe pleased, as I leave garlands for the babe.


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For the Contest: Poetry Writing #1
Sponsor: Broken Wings
12/16/2015
By nette onclaud

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~Blank Verse is poetry that is written
 in unrhymed iambic pentameter.
http://www.poeticterminology.net/07-blank-verse.html
* In theory, it consists of ten syllables though 8 or more 
syls are accepted.

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~This is one of my favorite forms as it allows me 
to combine a rhythmic, flowing pattern in iambic meter
with dash of free-verse style.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Poteet Avatar
December 20, 2015 at 6:12 AM
Congratulations, Nette, blank verse is not so easy to write as it might sound.. Love that phrase, pleated moss. The ending is your rainbow past the fog and grief of the graves - and the gold is the leaving of garlands for a child unknown.
Tor Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 5:18 AM
Nette congratulations on your winning form!!!
A. Sharma Avatar
December 18, 2015 at 9:33 PM
Yeah brilliant take nette with this lovely form, big congrats on top win!
A  Avatar
December 18, 2015 at 9:27 PM
Hi Nette, Congratulations on your sweet win Luv **SKAT**
A   Avatar
December 18, 2015 at 9:13 PM
Nette, CONGRATS ON YOUR WIN.... LINDA
Roper Avatar
December 18, 2015 at 5:07 PM
Better, beautiful write! Congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
Carmack Avatar
December 18, 2015 at 5:03 PM
Your skill set is impressive Nette. Congrats.
Dietrich Avatar
December 18, 2015 at 4:01 PM
big congrats to you, Nette!
Scars Avatar
December 18, 2015 at 3:01 PM
Nette...Congrats on your 1st place win:) *smiles*
Canerdy Avatar
December 18, 2015 at 2:20 PM
Beautiful, moving--Congrats--Janice
Allison Avatar
December 18, 2015 at 2:01 PM
The imagery is sad but so stunning Nette - this is not a form I am familiar with and I do struggle with Iambic meter - congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xxx
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
December 17, 2015 at 8:44 AM
Nette, in any form I know you will fly high, I'm so proud of you sailing on.. =`) Your contests and your poems are some of my inspirations... =`) MAligayang PAsko!!! yakapssssss! hehehe, Olive ELosia =`)
Dietrich Avatar
December 16, 2015 at 6:56 PM
yes, it seems interspersed with the free verse as well, Nette! A very interesting form you chose to show. It's one we don't see too much of here at Soup.
Kendrick Avatar
December 16, 2015 at 4:20 PM
Enjoyed reading your contest entry..Reads like a winner to me..Way to go..Sara
Marcum Wong Avatar
December 16, 2015 at 2:22 PM
The richness in this poem is a fine example of this form. I am sure you won't have any problems getting on the winner's list with this incredible piece Nette! I wish you a Mele Kalikimaka! Aloha, Connie
Paras Avatar
December 16, 2015 at 10:11 AM
The beauty of this poem lies in metaphors blending grief with comfort. All the lines really stand out for me. You got me!
Arana Avatar
December 16, 2015 at 9:29 AM
Wow, I didn't see the clincher coming. For me, this is a heartfelt, excellent poem filled with compassion!
Casto Avatar
December 16, 2015 at 8:57 AM
Stirring poetry and fluid lines! Your big heart allows a generosity to feel for others who are pained from death.
Andresen Avatar
December 16, 2015 at 5:49 AM
- Highly recommended well written poem, which will top the winner list dear Nette - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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