Lin Lane Poet Free verse

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On Crested Waves

Mighty Ocean,

      In your shoal I stand, peering over the swells of your surface.
Your gentle waves roll upon the sand, soothing and massaging
my feet with your deft fingers...ebbing and flowing in rhythmic beat.
Would you be so kind to grant me something I cannot do myself?
Trapped upon your shores, I have no way to search for my husband.
He sailed away many months ago seeking riches - a pirate's treasure, 
but if my tears were diamonds, we'd be rich beyond all measure.

     If in a bottle, I send him a note, would your tide take it on
the morrow? I would seal it well to ensure it would float.
There's no other way I know of to rid me of sorrow and grief.
In my worst fear, he lies entangled in kelp, and if he thinks they're 
my arms wrapped around him, he'll drown feeling that it was I,
holding him in his sleep. But if he still lives, he needs a sign of hope
that he will return to me...home with me, where he belongs.
My note will help him hear my voice, cried in mournful song.

              My heart entreats you, great stormy sea
                     carry my bottle on crested waves of blue
              Or my treasure trove of hurt will surely be
                     the cause of my death;  the last thing I do.

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Gregory Richard Barden February 3, 2020 at 12:40 PM Another going to my favorites ... for the reasons of all great poetry, and for reasons that are inexpressible for me. Depth and poignancy beyond word.

Kp Nunez November 13, 2015 at 6:27 PM This is already almost prose poetry, Lin! The only difference is that this is addressed to something while haibun is much like a contemplation plus a haiku. Let me know if you come out with a haibun, ok? Meanwhile, this is great in itself and is a 7 for me. Lin Lane November 13, 2015 at 6:40 PM Thank you so much, Kim, for such generous praise and the 7.

Afolabi Muideen November 13, 2015 at 2:05 PM What a great write my friend Lin. This is truly awesome and beautiful..........A.M. Lin Lane November 13, 2015 at 2:16 PM Thank you very much, A.M. It makes me smile to know you like it so well.

Cherl Dunn November 13, 2015 at 1:02 PM Dear Lin Lane What a marvelous work here my friend, love ever line and verse simply amazing, love the imagery, a brilliant piece that I give you a seven for and believe you me, I don't give seven out easily my friend, but you deserve it for this wonderful piece of poetry, and thank you also for your review of my works also, cheri Lin Lane November 13, 2015 at 1:54 PM Thank you, Cheryl...all the more grateful because you give your 7s with reserve.