On a Clear Night When the Full Moon Was Very Bright

Moonlight on my bed
Wakes me from my dream
Memories of you
The sound of a stream
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Joe Avatar
March 1, 2009 at 5:29 AM
Jim I like the use of economy here. The poem captures the moment well and does not pretend to be anything other that a poem that want to instill an image in the mind of the reader. I like the way that you have measured this poem without making anything look forced. The five sylables create enough a good feeling in the reader as each of the lines home through its image. (I wonder if a colon on the end of the third line might not make the poem look better?)
Jordan Avatar
February 27, 2009 at 8:51 PM
Jim I love the simplistic beauty of this poem - God Bless, MJ
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