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A Craig Cornish Contest; New Year's Old Wishes ...2 Jan 2025
Old wishes drift on tainted strands gathering mist, out to the sky-- a balmy tree where our restful arms entwine that soon... stars ebb and glimmer far like kisses fierce, then gently tossed into many decades of moonlight and gust. On the last of winter's flakes, pale shadows came for you unannounced--- I bled, agonized on piles of shattered ice homeless within our cozy room...where are you? And swallows reel across the tracks my breathing low, engraved with sighs upon dim tears and gentle rain ; this need to grow old with you undone: I dream no longer of new season's list As aging years become—cold, languid While birdsong’s hymn remind me... How lovely your eyes are, asleep.

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Date: 1/31/2025 11:44:00 AM
How lovely! I especially loved your closing line.
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Date: 1/31/2025 11:43:00 AM
How lovely! I especially loved your closing line.
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Date: 1/15/2025 10:32:00 AM
Just beautiful. Deserved win.
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Date: 1/10/2025 5:06:00 PM
Beautifully done. Congratulations on a well-deserved win!
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Date: 1/8/2025 1:10:00 PM
Well, look at you placing high in a Craig contest with a sad, forlorn piece of missing and wishing
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Date: 1/8/2025 9:38:00 AM
Exceptional writing Nette, you're truly an artist that Poe would praise - no wasted words nor embellishments that hold the reader's hand - you lead them helplessly into their own thoughts and memories!
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Date: 1/7/2025 6:53:00 PM
Beautiful words, Nette, This need to grow old with you… undone Says it all. Well deserved win. Hugs.
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Date: 1/7/2025 12:39:00 PM
Ahhh, so romantic but bittersweet. Love it , nette. I am so glad to share a top win with you, the star! Congrats
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Date: 1/6/2025 4:28:00 PM
Nette, a wonderful tribute to the strength of thought of a relationship cut short. This poem strikes me as very well written and what I would expect from a very talented poet. You have great range and breadth! Smiles! A pleasure to see.
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Date: 1/3/2025 4:54:00 PM
Breathtaking, Nette! Truly. A fav for me!
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Date: 1/2/2025 2:59:00 AM
So heartrending, This is my biggest dread but you describe it with such grace and beauty. God never gives us more than we can endure. Sending a heart full of love. SuZ
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