Seren Roberts Poet Choka

Old Gnarled Bench - Choka Contest

a large old gnarled bench
by a much older gnarled tree
where the old men sit to dream
of happy boyhoods
love was foremost in their  minds
now keeping awake is hard

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Brenda Meier-Hans September 30, 2014 at 12:27 PM Congratulations on your win Seren Seren Roberts September 30, 2014 at 7:17 PM thank you so much Brenda ...Seren

Ma Yaseen September 28, 2014 at 11:09 PM Congrats for your win for a splendid write.// Malik Seren Roberts September 30, 2014 at 7:17 PM Thank you Malik I am glad you enjoyed it ...Seren

Nette Onclaud September 28, 2014 at 1:22 AM deeply moving, seren.. cheers on your sparkling win.. huggs Seren Roberts September 28, 2014 at 3:56 AM Thanks Nette.....Seren

Andrea Dietrich September 27, 2014 at 9:28 PM One of the best I have seen. Comparing the old men to the gnarled bench and having them sitting beneath the tree dreaming of better times was a great idea. Congrats for your win. Seren Roberts September 27, 2014 at 10:02 PM Thank you so much Andrea,I never see how good or bad my work is, not sure how I can overcome this. So am surprised when poems are placed and well read.... Seren thank you once more...S

Debbie Guzzi September 27, 2014 at 4:01 PM I like this very much! I'm faving it!Congrad's Light & Love Seren Roberts September 27, 2014 at 8:50 PM thank you Debbie in honouring me with a fav. ...Seren

Abdul Malik Mandani September 27, 2014 at 10:10 AM Can you direct me to 'gnarled tree' please? A thoughtful write. congrats. Seren Roberts September 27, 2014 at 8:51 PM Hi Abdul thanks for your congrats. Seren

Dr. Upma A. Sharma September 27, 2014 at 9:46 AM And back again wid huge congrats on ur awesome win Seren! Seren Roberts September 27, 2014 at 8:52 PM thank you Dr Upma with your congrats, I am well pleased....Seren

Faye Gibson September 27, 2014 at 8:44 AM Nicely done, Seren. Congrats!

Richard Lamoureux September 27, 2014 at 8:35 AM Clever and fun, congratulations.

Maurice Yvonne September 27, 2014 at 7:39 AM Congratulations Seren for a well placed well deserved win.

Tim Smith September 27, 2014 at 6:21 AM This is fantastic.... Reminiscing of past loves...beautiful.... Congrats.... I'll smack Maurice too...Lol....hugs Tim

Paul Callus September 27, 2014 at 6:05 AM This is a lovely mixture of serious and witty truths. The first 3 lines age excellently. Congrats on a merited win. // paul

Dr.Ram Mehta September 27, 2014 at 2:00 AM Thanks for the entry and support. Congrats on the win, Seren Roberts September 27, 2014 at 3:14 AM thank you Ram I am glad u liked it....Seren

Maurice Yvonne September 19, 2014 at 9:35 AM Which part is hard? Are we talking about trousers? It is a terrible thing to outlive your wit. Excellent choka. Hope it rates high in the contest. Seren Roberts September 27, 2014 at 3:14 AM Smack. Maurice lol....Seren

Dr. Upma A. Sharma September 18, 2014 at 2:18 AM Wow that's a truth n wonderfully expressed Seren! Lovely choka! Good luck! Seren Roberts September 18, 2014 at 1:52 PM Hi thanks for your comment....Seren

Jan Allison September 18, 2014 at 1:38 AM Love the imagery and humour here Seren:-) good luck in the contest. Hugs jan xx Seren Roberts September 18, 2014 at 1:53 PM thanks Jan glad u enjoyed.....Seren