Old Age Melting Away

When hidden reflections and murmurs explode; as heart’s queries are but left unanswered till seasons melt, thaw quite hurriedly, my callous pride dismissing nights from human warmth never felt: This life , a ghostly breeze Yearns for sweet kinship-- but in old years, I languish on my Own. 4/1/2018 Contest: Line Gauthier’s Melting Snowball `Decrease in syllables

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Date: 4/19/2018 11:00:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this haunting and resigned write of loneliness.
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Date: 4/18/2018 3:54:00 AM
Congratulations, Nette on your well deserved win.
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Date: 4/17/2018 7:54:00 PM
Back with congratulations on your win .. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 4/17/2018 12:04:00 PM
- Best wishes and congratulations with your 3rd place in the contest, Nette :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/17/2018 11:20:00 AM
well expressed Nette, congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 4/17/2018 10:43:00 AM
Congrats on your bronze medal finish with this lovely poem, nette.
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Date: 4/4/2018 9:14:00 AM
So many goosebumps, as I relate way too strongly to these lines. In the words of Metallica: "By myself, but not alone."
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Date: 4/4/2018 8:30:00 AM
Very well expressed Nette. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Rick.
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Date: 4/1/2018 9:52:00 PM
I love your sentiment dear poet, yet the vitality within your write..no...I find no languish (feeble) 'bout you Nette! Have a beautiful Spring...Much love, james
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Date: 4/1/2018 9:21:00 PM
excellent write, Nette, luck in the contest.. .. Hope you had a wonderful Easter...Hugs Eve
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Date: 4/1/2018 9:20:00 PM
The theme of your poem fits perfectly with the snowball form, Nette. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 4/1/2018 2:02:00 PM
I've seen households like a busy street then years roll by and just one person left, sad fact of life. Good luck Nette. Tom
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Date: 4/1/2018 12:45:00 PM
The ego can stifle lasting ties with humans. Your astonishing poem sends a strong message as loneliness can deprive special memories in old age.
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Date: 4/1/2018 12:23:00 PM
- For thought ... touching, Nette - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/1/2018 11:13:00 AM
Reflective discourse...depicting the feelings of many as they age..best for a win, nette.
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Date: 4/1/2018 10:41:00 AM
A well expressed sad poem Nette ! This is how people can feel. You have shown it well.
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Date: 4/1/2018 10:31:00 AM
Sad ending to your poem, how sad so many old people feel lonely.. Nice shape..
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