Off To the Races For Grampa Norm

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Off to the races for Grandpa Norm Off to the races for Grandpa Norm Off to the races for Grandpa Norm He's my favorite grandpa though Some may consider him a bit odd Because he plays with us and other boys and girls Grandpa Norm is so sweet He gives us treats He comes in love, he gives us love Off to the races for Grandpa Norm Off to the races for Grandpa Norm He's my favorite grandpa though Running round the house and yard we run Together we're having so much fun Chasing each other watchin him chase the dog As the dog chases the cat chases us Me and my brothers and sisters Playing games once again grandpa off to the races 2/3/18 written words by James Edward Lee Sr. arranged music by Kevin Kern

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/6/2018 12:46:00 PM

Thanks for taking my suggestion. The piece flows and the images enchant.

James Edward Lee Sr.
Date: 2/7/2018 12:57:00 PM

No! thank you for your support and backing. We're all helpers one to another. Let's rise and write together Praises in poetry... James :0

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/5/2018 7:40:00 AM

“Grandpa Norm was so sweet.” Overall a good piece. You might want to change was to is. The rest of the piece is present tense and this line you changed to past tense. If you hadn’t switched again to present tense that would have been fine.

James Edward Lee Sr.
Date: 2/7/2018 12:58:00 PM

Write On Richard, good lookin' out thanks again thanks!!! James