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Gently tousled leaves
Vivid the emerald fronds
Soon will turn to gold


*Placed 7th in Matt Caliri's contest, "Write Now!" (Approximately 50 seconds)

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Date: 9/19/2009 1:49:00 PM

Good use of imagery for a creative perspective. Congratulations on being one of the winners in Matt's contest. Enjoy your honor. Wishing you continued success. Karen

Brian Strand

Date: 9/14/2009 12:52:00 AM

Congrats on your success in Matt's contest Donna.Rgds Brian

Raul Moreno

Date: 9/12/2009 12:15:00 PM

The haiku is excellent...I would love to read more of them...Raul

Raul Moreno

Date: 9/12/2009 12:14:00 PM

Donna, congrats on your success in the contest...Raul

Elaine George

Date: 9/12/2009 6:58:00 AM

ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL HAIKU, donna. congratulations on your well deserved win in Matt's Contest. Lainie

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 9/12/2009 5:24:00 AM

Beautiful!!! And congratulations, Donna. You did it! Your “Write Now” poem is among the winners in Matt’s contest. You did at great job letting your beautiful thoughts flow at lightning speed. Keep up the good writing. SMILES… Dane Ann

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/11/2009 5:26:00 PM

Congratulations on your win in Matt's contest Donna. Love, Carol

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/11/2009 12:59:00 PM

Lovely write....50 seconds ...amazing!!!

Brian Strand

Date: 8/28/2009 8:25:00 AM

Best wishes with this one Donna.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments today.

James Marshall Goff

Date: 8/25/2009 6:31:00 PM

the word 'emerald' in any poem is a winner! Donna! good work! jimbo

James Fraser

Date: 8/15/2009 7:21:00 PM

Lovely Autumn Haiku, the colors in nature are awesome>>James

Diane Christian

Date: 8/15/2009 5:57:00 AM

a great write in 50 seconds, I was going to enter that contest but I would need time to think, LOL thanks for your kind comments God bless you from diane

Sean Kelly

Date: 8/15/2009 4:47:00 AM

Clever name and presentation , Donna , so write onnnnnnnn ....

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 8/15/2009 4:44:00 AM

awesome--charma

Brian Strand

Date: 8/15/2009 12:54:00 AM

Best wishes with this one Donna.Thanks for your welcome comments today.Rgds Brian

Sue Mason

Date: 8/14/2009 10:20:00 PM

Yes indeed it will soon be time for all the foliage to "show off" again ... smile ... wonderful haiku here and good luck in Matt's contest !!

Matthew Anish

Date: 8/14/2009 7:09:00 PM

Seems we are talking about a similar place. Do you know the Robert Frost poem "Nothing Gold can Stay"? Fine haiku - keep it up! Yours Matthew Anish

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/14/2009 7:06:00 PM

Excellent job....wow, 50 seconds!

John Freeman

Date: 8/14/2009 6:49:00 PM

And very beautiful gold of fall. Your comments Always welcome a greatly appreciated. Yes sometimes you have to dress the truth of God's love up a little to attract, the mind to read it. Lol. Although the love of the human being is the centerfold of himself, the heart of the soul. No untruth there, thanks so much for reading, Sincerely Moses

Date: 8/14/2009 6:06:00 PM

Wow! The fact that you came up with a poem so vivid in imagery in just 50 seconds is amazing. I predict a win with this one. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Have a good weekend. Karen