Susan Gentry Poet Rhyme

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Of Water

To be on water is to be of water I'm told
The sea a deep blue and unsettling cold
Offshore waves roar in and relentlessly roll 
Cleansing rounds that forcefully come and go
In many ways water is what makes me whole

Sailors proclaim water eases mental pain
Replaces rage and grief and peacefulness remains 
Water's spirituality is a blessing to maintain
It never fails to deliver me from a life mundane

Rhythmic ocean swells crash wildly to the shore
Powerful breathing reconnects my inner core
Time spent on the water passes time of before

I savor opportunities to be with water's universe
With great respect for the sea and all this incurs

Time by the sea effects the body, mind and soul
  
Water's medicinal effects are wondrous to behold
All negativity evaporates and serenity sustains 
It always leaves me thirsty, coming back for more
Men of sea have useful knowledge to disperse
If all these waters abandon me, life would be painful


March 24, 2018



Gregory Barden's MINUANETTA Contest using rhyme scheme of AAAAA, BBBB, CCC, DD, E, ABCDE, at least 20 lines.Theme is "CHREMAMORPHISM"
Third Place

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Subimal Sinha-Roy April 30, 2018 at 1:50 AM Congratulations, Susan on your win. You treated water in a beautiful poetic way. Susan Gentry April 30, 2018 at 8:19 AM Thank you Sublimal. Appreciate your input always.

Sandra Haight April 29, 2018 at 3:37 PM A beautiful tribute to the wonders of water, Susan! I love the imagery you present to support the physical, mental and spiritual gifts it brings to you! Congratulations on your well-deserved podium win. Hugs, Sandra Susan Gentry April 30, 2018 at 12:04 AM Thanks Sandra. I'm sitting here smiling big time! You would think I won a million $$. Lol

Gregory Richard Barden April 29, 2018 at 1:23 PM This was exquisite, Susan, and a favorite subject matter for me, (as I have always been a "water" person, as at home underwater as I am on land) ... your command of the form was quite evident, and your imagery and flow just plain excellent - LOVED it! Congratulations on your placement, and thank you for entering my contest! :-) Susan Gentry April 30, 2018 at 12:02 AM Thank you so much! Am honored to be on your list. :) Thank you for all you do.

Line Gauthier April 29, 2018 at 7:57 AM A wonderful tribute. Congrats on your win, Susan. Susan Gentry April 29, 2018 at 8:36 AM Thanks Line!

Subimal Sinha-Roy April 29, 2018 at 12:35 AM Congratulations, Susan on your great win. You have nicely rhymed the beauty of water, the elixir of life. Susan Gentry April 29, 2018 at 1:05 AM Thank you! Same to you :)

Natasha Turner April 28, 2018 at 11:42 PM Beautiful. Congrats :) Susan Gentry April 29, 2018 at 1:04 AM Thanks for reading and commenting :)

Gershon Wolf April 8, 2018 at 9:28 PM Sparkling imagery and powerful, comprehensive sweep of the totality of H2O. Water should feel indebted to you for elevating it as you have! Bravo! :) Gershon Susan Gentry April 9, 2018 at 9:26 PM Thank you! You are so kind.

Jan Allison March 29, 2018 at 10:40 PM Such wonderful imagery Susan:-) I live on a tiny little Island in the middle of the irish sea - I love walking out by the sea and the ever changing conditions around me:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx Susan Gentry March 30, 2018 at 10:22 PM Awww that's my dream some day! Thank you for reading and commenting. Appreciate that.

Janice Canerdy March 29, 2018 at 8:44 PM Paints a very vivid picture, Susan! Janice Susan Gentry March 30, 2018 at 10:20 PM Thanks Janice! Glad you stopped by and commented.

Cheryl Hoffman March 27, 2018 at 9:46 PM An awesome depiction of the ocean Susan; great imagery and rhyme! Good luck in the contest!~Che :) Susan Gentry March 29, 2018 at 12:31 AM Thanks Cheryl! Appreciate your feedback.

Silent One March 26, 2018 at 6:14 AM An excellent entry for this contest, great imagery... Susan Gentry March 29, 2018 at 12:31 AM Thank you!!

Andrea Dietrich March 25, 2018 at 7:22 PM and I see you are like me concerning the water. I feel I should have been born near the coast. I love the beach so much and the sight of the ocean. Susan Gentry March 29, 2018 at 12:30 AM :) Exactly!

Andrea Dietrich March 25, 2018 at 7:21 PM Very well done for the Minuanetta challenge, Susan. Wasn't that difficult? I remember taking over two hours to compose mine. Good luck in the contest. Susan Gentry March 29, 2018 at 12:29 AM Thanks Andrea! Yes, very difficult. Good luck to you too.

Viv Wigley March 25, 2018 at 1:55 AM I live so far from the sea I can relate to this fine piece, Susan. Good luck in the contest. Viv x Susan Gentry March 29, 2018 at 12:28 AM Thanks!

Akkina Downing March 24, 2018 at 11:49 PM Oh I totally enjoyed this one, I did grow up living on the beach and always in the water. I can't live anywhere far from the ocean. It's part of my life! Susan I love your poem and it's a win for me... hugs :) Susan Gentry March 29, 2018 at 12:28 AM Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. I appreciate your input.

Sunlite Wanter March 24, 2018 at 6:58 PM Lovely to read - I often felt the waves. Susan Gentry March 24, 2018 at 9:48 PM Thank you for reading and commenting.

Chris Green March 24, 2018 at 5:54 PM This was fantastic Susan and hopefully does well in the contest. This one truly speaks to me as I feel most alive by the water. Susan Gentry March 24, 2018 at 9:48 PM Thanks Chris! Glad you liked it.