Odinkwa

Serene, yet filled with emptiness
Moon dust of dreams veiling the eyes
Fate: a river no strength contest
Brought you forth: a promised prize
And I with pounding heart beheld
For the first time my love and desire
Castled in flesh, and pride upwelled
For this El Dorado that many did aspire
To find, and some this gold touched
But never knew the beauty in their hands
For here mortal senses are hushed
And love ungilded dance on golden sands
That tells heart's joy for a child's birth
And coming, like soft flowers. Stared I
At the beauty that eclipsed the earth
From my mind: love in a mirrorless eye

And you were my first, my strength, my
Eternal godlikeness no logic could deny.


(Deborah ask me for a footnote: Odinkwa is not only my first son, but his name is Nigerian. Kwa 
is the group of Bantu-Congo languages that includes many language groups in Ghana and 
Nigeria as well. Odin is the Egyptian god Amun that became Akwashani in India and Odin in 
Scandinavia. Odinkwa is the god who speaks with one voice
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009


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Date: 6/17/2009 7:17:00 PM
Beautiful and heartfelt. Birth is the ultimate sunrise. You described it wonderfully. Congratulations.
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Date: 6/16/2009 7:23:00 PM
I love this: "Stared I at the beauty that eclipsed the earth from my mind: love in a mirrorless eye" Beautiful! Congrats!
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Date: 6/16/2009 2:34:00 AM
Congrats on your succes in Debbie's contest David .Rgds Brian
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Date: 6/15/2009 8:11:00 PM
Congratulations David on your win. Joy in the first child will never b eclipsed. Joyce
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Date: 6/15/2009 7:36:00 PM
Such a beautiful write....breathtaking! Congrats in winning 3rd place in the contest, David!! ~ Carrie
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Date: 5/21/2009 9:49:00 PM
Many beautiful phrases that convey a great sense of your heart, David. Love especially the was "mortal senses are hushed." There is a lot of serenity in this awesome write. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/19/2009 1:21:00 PM
Oh such a breathtaking tribute. Your words deeply beautiful so inspire. Our children no doubt life most precious gifts, our own miracles. Your style, your gift is outstanding and most unique expression. Exceptional poet. Love, Shar
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Date: 5/19/2009 10:56:00 AM
this poem flat out satisfies...nice! Jim
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Date: 5/19/2009 7:21:00 AM
David this is stunning writing. Very heartfelt! Thank you for sharing your words.
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