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I have contemplated more on this piece, and am given to understand that senryu tend more to the satirical

also the above does have seasonal content though not in the 1st line..' as it is a contemplative write I must

revert its genre to the haiku, which I did originally place it under I make this revision on the 28th 10th 2015

The reflective aspects, are the porcelain bowl, imagine also a rising moon.' this would cast a sickle shadow

at the bowl base, another moon stage that will be.' yet now is not.. Also the current moon is round like the

bowl the tounge is pink, the blossom is pink chablis refers to the shade of the sake, and the tast to me has

a metal brackish taste as it blossoms on the tounge.' as you may already know the sake from noritake speaks of the liquid and the bowl I have shown all of this write & I won't do this ever again

I only did it because I had expanded it 80 percent already..' all the best Joe.' 10 2 2017

Ode To Sake From Noritake

invert & impassive,

moon reflective like.. shadow"

taste blossom; copper chablis..

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Skat A

November 3, 2015 at 9:21 PM

Joe, :) Congratulations on having your poem featured in the soups, Home Page. ~SKAT LOVE~

Daver Austin

November 2, 2015 at 12:02 PM

I like this little drunken piece, Joe. Congrats and love, daver

James Fraser

May 3, 2015 at 6:30 PM

An oldie of yours but a goodie Joe, nice one, smiles, James :) :)

Matthew Anish

August 12, 2014 at 3:07 PM

I like a little wine myself now and then. Fine ode to the Japanese variant of wine. I should order some the next time I eay Japanese food. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Poet Destroyer A

July 8, 2012 at 8:41 PM

Hello, Joe.. here to say hi, and read your ku' on this fine china set... hope you had more tableware.. enjoyed..pd

Gwendolen Song

May 28, 2012 at 8:30 PM

Hi Joe, I researched Noritake, the patterns, the influence, the historical significance of the changes in designs....I got no clue as to what you are looking for in this contest...I could just write about beautiful China but it is probably NOT what you are looking for...these hidden meanings are very HIDDEN to me...sorry Joe...I am not as sophisticated as the rest of these guys. Love, Gwendolen

Joann Grisetti

May 24, 2012 at 9:57 AM

With a syllable count of 6-7-7 this is more like a katuaka. Which form do you want in y our contest? 5-7-5 or 5-7-7 or 6-7-7?

Carolyn Devonshire

May 12, 2012 at 1:35 PM

Awesome images here, Joe. I like the way you describe the moon as "reflective" with a copper chablis blossom. I have all sorts of thoughts running through my head reading this. I will see if I can work with these thoughts and produce some haiku. I have been too ill to be on the Soup the past few days. Doing a little better today. Love, Carolyn

Debbie Guzzi

May 6, 2012 at 6:43 PM

yup totally nonsensicle ..not a haiku...noritake is tableware? tableware writing a tribute to rice wine? shadows don't reflect a solid CASTES a shadow...the moon does reflect the light of the sun..copper tastes YUCKY! ever sucked a penny? LOL actually BLOOD tastes like copper? rose? not sure what you are doing Joe unless it's a puzzle?

Joe Maverick

May 7, 2012 at 4:07 PM

Thanks for your comment Debbie,, i just hoped to get some great poems which i am sure i will." I like the way you think on this.." but you need to break out of such a confined approach.." and to be fair i think you could..! whether or not you realise you touch close to the aspects that are there..!

Deborah Burch

May 6, 2012 at 10:07 AM

Fabulous!!! Joe! Everything plays off of each other :) This is a fav !! What a melding pot of metaphors LOL... I love it! Big Hugs, love , deb

Andrea Dietrich

May 6, 2012 at 8:46 AM

is this the one you refer to in your blog? Sorry, I am really bad with puzzles, JOe. You should let them know in the blog where LOL is. It's not on your first page. I'll go track it down if I can.

Jack Horne

March 9, 2012 at 3:33 PM

fascinating piece, Joe - love the title too

Jslambert Mister Roboto

November 11, 2011 at 3:44 PM

this one's got stYle...7rate and to my faves. Cheers and down goes the Sake with some Teriyaki Shiitake!=

Elizabeth Wesley

November 9, 2011 at 7:44 PM

Thanks for your expansion on the poem. Gives the verse so much more depth and I need to learn to grasp these deeper meanings. It all weaves together so beautifully.

Joe Maverick

October 11, 2011 at 6:12 PM

I shall try to expand this poem..it is a fun write on one level:) i e, sake being drunk from a china Noritake bowl theMade in Japan, i hope.!) the taste chablis/copper, also the bowl is concave invert..impassive the moon is a cresent also invert, the blossom is soft white, like the moon, the taste of sake blossoms...on tounge pink like blossom cherry..

Debbie Guzzi

October 10, 2011 at 7:24 PM

http://groups.yahoo.com/group/worldkigolibrary/message/71........... http://sites.google.com/site/graceguts/essays/haiku-checklist....both are clear excellent writes to keep near the comp

Robert A. Dufresne

July 2, 2011 at 7:57 AM

Ingenious title for a tasteful poem, Joe. Well done!

Nette Onclaud

July 2, 2011 at 4:50 AM

how did i miss this sensitive piece, joe? moon tasting blossom and wine?? i'm awed! ..lovely imagery! :) hugs. nette

Carolyn Devonshire

June 20, 2011 at 2:07 PM

Thank you for your kind comment, Joe. Still waiting for the test results, but I'll let you know when I hear something. Thank you for caring! Love, Carolyn

Carolyn Devonshire

June 19, 2011 at 12:04 PM

I can see the image of the "impassive moon" so well through your words. Wonder if we could sip from the moon and find a "copper chablis." Eloquently written, Joe. Love and blessings, Carolyn

Michelle Mac Donald

June 19, 2011 at 9:23 AM

Cheers, Joe! An astute tribute to the "chablis", "Sake from Noritake". A faint flinty taste, yet still holds its own in the wine industy. Very clever! Best wishes, Mikki

Andrea Dietrich

June 17, 2011 at 8:35 PM

Is this for lines and shadows? That topic fits your style very well, Joe. I can't think of a thing to do for that contest!!

Sara Kendrick

June 17, 2011 at 5:25 PM

That is a pretty flask.Not expensive either.Great fall colors..Very impressive work describing it..Thanks for the kind review of my work.Yes, I wrote another work about my father's death.I did not expect him to die but he had said that if someone doesn't do something for me I am going to die.I just thought that they would do surgery and he would be alright.I knew in my heart that he was gone a good thirty minutes before anyone told me he had died.I felt this spirit of him come to me pass on.Sara