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Ode 2 My Poetry

Why can't I do it how I want to do it? Been told my rhymes are sophomoric - at best I may violate pentameter but I write what I like Why must it pass some journal's vapid test? Behind a block of writers I've been hiding Cowed by thoughts of editing snafus Trying to write deep, intensive tomes of valid lore Only to be chastened and abused There's elegance found in concise expression Saying all the world in just a line No matter that I know this, I belabor all my thoughts Create elegies for elegance in time Onomatopoeia is my best friend And alliteration waltzes through my dreams Thoughts chatter, clatter, chirp and clunk around about my head Demanding that they be released in streams And after I have done what I have done here Exposed my heart by opening my head I send it forth with hope that someone will enjoy my words And get rejection letters only, in their stead Won't you like my poem - just a little? I promise it won't be a trite conceit I don’t emulate the standard ways of any other writer But you've called my words monotonous and cheap But yet my writing keeps on remonstrating That whether it be ballad or blank verse It should be able to do, just exactly what it feels like And it finds your journal editing perverse It says it does not care if it is published Doesn't want you to consider it profound For if you did, it might become repetitive and common And make cool people, like me, put it down But won't you like my poem just a little? At the least - you could be non-committal

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 9/18/2020 6:42:00 PM
I thought I would read your first piece. A very entertaining write. Blessings Richard. It looks like we started at a similar time.
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Date: 1/27/2013 8:45:00 AM
Hello Mari, :-) Congratulations with your featured poem of the week. Glad to see you among the poets on the soups front page. Love your wonderful verse. Have your self a nice & beautiful Sunday... ~PD
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Date: 1/23/2013 5:20:00 AM
More than a little..thanks.
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Date: 1/21/2013 7:27:00 PM
About your poem: it is perfect and the last verse blew me away.. sometimes poetry is not as easy once we get into the grove of it. I remember when picking up the pen was all a test... and all that ran across my mind was to please myself and not others. It is a different story now... all I want is for peeps to love and want me to put it all down on paper... love the ode to your poem... always~ PD
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Mari Banks
Date: 1/22/2013 12:40:00 PM
It's so hard to decide who the work is for - does that make sense? On the one hand, I write because I must on the other, I want some type of affirmation that others like what I have written - or at least get it. I should be able to write without that - and I do, but I'd be lying if I said I didn't want it both ways. :O/ m
Date: 1/21/2013 7:24:00 PM
Mari, stopping by to say hi ;-) and welcome you to this lovely soup bowl. My name is Linda; everyone here calls me PD for fun. I'm here reading and enjoying new poets to love, appreciate and adore. (And make friends with:-) Please do not hesitate to look me up here on the soup if you need feedback on your poetry. I am looking forward to following your poems as you grow and post here at the POETRY SOUP. Take care~ LUV *LINDA
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Mari Banks
Date: 1/22/2013 12:37:00 PM
You are kind to offer your support Linda, please don't be mad at me when I take you up on it!! lol After reading some of your work, I see that you have a great deal of experience and knowledge to offer so you WILL be hearing from me ;O) m
Date: 1/16/2013 1:23:00 AM
Beautiful piece! Welcome to the soup!
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Date: 1/10/2013 8:33:00 PM
I like this poem a lot for the fact you are not trying to over impress and seeing your own frailties as a poet. Take heart in your endeavors as I have learnt since joining Poetrysoup, its not always what you think is your best write is the most popular and vice versa. At the end of the day it is the pleasure shared by all which is most important.
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Mari Banks
Date: 1/14/2013 6:27:00 PM
Thanks for the advice Robert. I will take it to heart.
Date: 1/10/2013 7:02:00 AM
Welcome to P-Soup, Mari! Pleasant with the "new poets", you write very well. - Hope you will get much pleasure to share your thoughts and poems here with us. - Have a enjoyable day - Love from Norway / / Anne-Lise :)
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Mari Banks
Date: 1/10/2013 1:18:00 PM
Wow! Thank you SO much for the support Anne-Lise! I am flattered that you took your time to read it. I read your poem about the ship in the bottle (please forgive my lack of memory of the title) and it blew me away! Thanks for reaching out! mari
Date: 1/9/2013 11:45:00 PM
Mari, I like this poem, it is very good. Most of it makes very good sense and has good flow and rhyme. Even though I know you are being facitious, the theme set me back just a little. Would never think of asking for no comments on a poem. The only thing I think needs to be improved is the thought in last verse. If one finds your poem profound it can't also be common???? Will modify comment as soon as I know you read it. Thanks for writing.
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Mari Banks
Date: 1/9/2013 11:56:00 PM
Hi Charles! Thank you for your thoughtful and considerate feedback. I am new here and really did not know what to expect. I am glad you liked it because, in contrast to my claims, it actually really matters to me that others "get" my strange thoughts. LOL! I also appreciate your constructive remark about the end. I think you are correct. I will think about how to address that. Thanks for reading!

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