Ocular Floaters

Vacant but for
minute shadows,
I’d mistaken
for clouds

our sky has lied
again; it is
only blue;
chastely blue.

No longer do you
wait secretly 
behind celestial
skeins of dust.

You are only in my eyes.

©Kathryn McLoughlin Collins
September 16, 20012

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Stephen Kilmer

November 27, 2013 at 7:36 PM

I am sorry that I have not taken the time to read your poetry. This is beyond brilliant. I am sad, yet optimistic. Your words bring me closer to a truth that is only human. Thank you. ~Kilmer

Debbie Guzzi

October 22, 2012 at 9:28 PM

Oh my good one..always nice to read fresh metaphor! [I have those things floaters like small fish-hooks in my eyes!] The last line wraps it up very well! Light & Love

Keith Bickerstaffe

October 10, 2012 at 10:46 AM

'...chastely blue,' '...celestial skeins of dust,' (my favourite!) Excellent phrasing and images... you are truly one of a kind!! (and deserve a helluva lot more reviews!!!) Love, Keith

Joann Grisetti

September 22, 2012 at 6:47 PM

Beuatiful. I have these floaters, but could never have described them like this.

Cyndi Macmillan

September 19, 2012 at 9:52 AM

Incredibly sad and deep, and yet so beautiful. I love how you fit so much into just 13 lines! Hope you are well, enjoying autumn.... must fly, daughter has gone bonky! xox cyndi