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October Tanka

finally!    He’s home
candy bag on the table
he empties it out
sugar content enormous!
and    with one brown    crinkled leaf

cool    just a light frost
and the goblins are playing
for it’s Halloween
my doorbell rings    No one there
smell of sulfur in the air

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Amy Green

Date: 5/20/2010 6:40:00 AM

This is extremely sensitive toi my senses, great poem!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/10/2010 10:44:00 PM

great tanka, I really liked that first one with the crazy leaf in the mix!! so it's cold there , huh. We were around 50. Not great. but not bad either! Luv, andrea

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 1/23/2010 6:34:00 PM

Excellent Tanka, Daver! A double Tanka chucking full of literature goods. Wondereful job. Gotta try a double sometime soon. Thanks again Daver. Meant alot to me my friend. Robert

Milton Toran

Date: 11/10/2009 3:17:00 PM

Paranormal activity?? I love this! Great tanka! Keep writing. You have tons of talent as well as creativity! God bless! Milt

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/14/2009 8:02:00 AM

Interesting. What happened? Keep writing. Sara

Date: 10/13/2009 2:01:00 PM

Wonderful use of mulit-sense imagery and a creative format for an interesting poem. Just in time for the holiday. Thank you for sharing your talent with us and for taking time to comment on my haiku. Keep on writing!!!!!!! Karen

Elaine George

Date: 10/9/2009 7:07:00 PM

I can hardly wait! Re you comment - Yes! He played upon the fact that they said he was in league with the Devil - Dressing in black - pale skin and no teeth. He said " I am not good looking, but when the women hear me paly, they fall at my feet. Love, Lainie