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October Skies

You left me under dark October skies, My spirits crushed, like fragile autumn leaves, The naked trees exposed your barren lies But love came by, this heart no longer grieves. My spirits crushed, like fragile autumn leaves, You caused me so much suffering and pain, But love came by, this heart no longer grieves, The seasons change and sunshine followed rain. You caused me so much suffering and pain, The naked trees exposed your barren lies. The seasons change and sunshine followed rain: You left me under dark October skies. 06.10.19 Poet's October Pantoum Poetry Contest : sponsored by William Kekaula

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Date: 10/16/2019 11:24:00 PM
Wendy this is so very good! This flows beautifully and I love "The seasons change and sunshine followed rain" because it is so well said and TRUE. This reads like a winner to me :)
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Wendy Watson
Date: 10/23/2019 4:45:00 AM
What a lovely comment,P.S. Thank you for your encouragement.
Date: 10/7/2019 11:36:00 AM
Hi Wendy: Lost love and found love. Beautifully written!
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Wendy Watson
Date: 10/7/2019 12:41:00 PM
Thank you,Ralph. I'd never heard of a pantoum before 'Soup!'
Date: 10/7/2019 9:35:00 AM
Excellent pantoum Wendy, much enjoyed good luck in the comp. :)
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Wendy Watson
Date: 10/7/2019 12:41:00 PM
Thank you so much for your encouraging remarks, Gary.
Date: 10/6/2019 3:58:00 PM
Beautifully crafted Pantoum, good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Wendy Watson
Date: 10/7/2019 6:30:00 AM
Thank you, Jan. This was more difficult a challenge than it first appeared to be!
Date: 10/6/2019 10:46:00 AM
Oh, I love this Pantoum Wendy. Well written. I am happy you found love and happiness anew :)
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Wendy Watson
Date: 10/7/2019 6:29:00 AM
Thank you,Heidi. This was quite a tricky exercise!
Date: 10/6/2019 10:42:00 AM
Bravo Wendy! Well done. Pantoums are not easy but you made it flow!
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Wendy Watson
Date: 10/7/2019 6:29:00 AM
Thank you,Caren. I'm learning so much new vocabulary and so many poetic techniques on this site!

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