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Hurricane rages in Caribbean Sea 2016

October Feast of Winds

I hear the heavy breathing through my trees And Acorns angering the rooftop slate Whilst winds invade the Caribbean seas The hurricane metes out the islands’ fate The sunlight plays on sturdy trunks of day And limbs, they wave, with friendly Southern charm Whilst clouds do heighten the fear on display The cataclysm of the seas does harm I see the tickle of the Autumn leaves The feast of nuts below my cushioned feet Whilst anchored palms are torn apart by thieves As lions roar, the land declares defeat
2nd place winner A poem written in iambic pentameter 10/6/2016
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Kendrick Avatar
October 18, 2016 at 10:42 AM
Wonderful work in the winners' list..Way to go..Congrats on your placement..Sara
Rodrigues Avatar
October 18, 2016 at 4:11 PM
Thank you, Sara!
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October 18, 2016 at 4:11 PM
Thank you, Sara!
Krampe Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 4:09 PM
Very interesting poem, with the contrast, and it flows beautifully as if it was effortless. Congrats, Kim. Agnes
Rodrigues Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 7:29 PM
Thank you, Agnes! :)
Rodrigues Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 7:29 PM
Thank you, Agnes! :)
Haight Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 10:46 AM
An amazing contrast of October winds, Kim...the expected winds with falling acorns and leaves of 'Southern' charm...and those raging out at sea. As I read it, I was thinking about Hurrican Matthew...disaster in Haiti...compared to our US coast. Well-done and congratulation on your placement!
Rodrigues Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 7:28 PM
Thank you, Sandra! Exactly what I was writing about.
Webster Avatar
October 15, 2016 at 8:16 PM
Love the energetic imagery and ambiguities. Congratulations!
Rodrigues Avatar
October 15, 2016 at 8:19 PM
Thank you, Jack!
Turner Avatar
October 15, 2016 at 2:40 PM
This is a beautiful write about the winds of autumn, Mrs Kim. That last couplet is just wonderful!
Rodrigues Avatar
October 15, 2016 at 8:19 PM
Thank you, Daniel!
Canerdy Avatar
October 15, 2016 at 2:27 PM
Kim, thank you for participating in the contest. Congrats on your win! Janice
Rodrigues Avatar
October 15, 2016 at 2:46 PM
Thank you, Janice! I enjoy writing for your contest! xoxo
De Beaulieu Avatar
October 6, 2016 at 2:21 PM
Kim this is a beautiful poem.I read it twice nicely done.
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2016 at 3:10 PM
Thank you, Darlene! :)
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