Ocean of Sorrow

Since you left I seem to drift
Sorrow's current, very swift
Pulling me beyond yesterday's
Searing pain of velvet stingrays.

In this vast deceiving ocean
I drown in waves of emotion.
On the oily ocean floor of life
I try to dodge its knowing knife.

A tropical depression on my mind
In my fragile nakedness I find,
That memories are the true enemy
Deceiving fronds of the anemone.

In hungry oysters I plant the seed
On every sandy thought they feed.
Mother of pearl coating every care
I wear pearls of grief in my hair.

I explore this endangered coral reef
Your bright fishes touch my grief.
Memories in every detailed hue
Remembering the essence of you.

Are you even aware of the burning pain
Of yearning so much to see you again?
In the whirlpools of my mind
Will I ever sweet closure find?

Under rocks I find glistening tears
To keep as semi-precious souvenirs.
Timeless treasures to sustain tomorrow
As I dive into the ocean of sorrow.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008



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Date: 12/12/2008 9:22:00 AM
What heart-wrenchingly beautiful images you've woven into this poem. I love the oceanic atmosphere, and "I wear pearls of grief in my hair" is one of my favorite lines. Thank you so very much for your comments on my poetry, which I truly appreciate! ~Juliane
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Date: 10/19/2008 9:02:00 AM
Wow! I just read this one too and it blew me away!! Nigel
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Date: 10/11/2008 4:19:00 PM
Heidi, What a great write your poem Ocean of Sorrow is! The waves of gloom consume the readers. It is full of anguish and pain. The words come from a bleeding heart. Lines like "I wear pearls of grief in my hair "or "memories are true enemies" leave deep scars on reader's heart. The concluding stanza is remarkable. I take this opportunity to thank you for your beautiful comments on my featured poem The Musician. God Bless you. -Mohammad
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Date: 10/4/2008 8:05:00 AM
Heidi Cleverly written. So much hurt going on are there any good men left. I guess there all here on Poetry soup lol. You have a creative imagination. Looking forward to reading more of your works. Blessings Michael
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Date: 10/4/2008 12:16:00 AM
Thanks for your welcome comments on my poatings Heidie.Rgds Brian have a goo weekend
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Date: 10/3/2008 3:03:00 PM
Thanks for your comment. My book is now available: http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/1440414467
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Date: 9/30/2008 5:52:00 AM
Heartfelt write. If I leave before my wife, I would hope that she would find more happiness until we would meet again. For me it would be difficult. God Bless. Vince
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Date: 9/28/2008 8:15:00 PM
thank you Heidie for reading my poetry and for your comments, enjoyed reading this again, love the way you end it.
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Date: 9/28/2008 10:33:00 AM
I enjoyed reading this one again. Nice use of imagery and rhyme. I invite you to consider adding your creativity to our community poem "Tidbits." It's under my poems because I started it. I am amazed at how it is progressing. Thank you for your kind words regarding my poems. Keep on writing. Karen
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Date: 9/26/2008 3:50:00 PM
Heidie this is one of the best poems I have ever read in my life - the Metaphorical use is simply amazing and the emotion is just captivating - All I can say is WOW!!!!!!!! God Bless you hon
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Date: 9/25/2008 1:26:00 PM
And as usual you have created a masterpiece in that style that you know. so well writen and the search for oceans treasures had me mystified. John H Loving III
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Date: 9/24/2008 5:16:00 AM
Excellent rhythmic flow, expressions of the pained soul are very well conveyed within each line of this magnificent write. Thank you Heidie for sharing the read and for your lovely comments on my works. God Bless, Always, Adell
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Date: 9/23/2008 4:20:00 PM
the flow of this write is so melodious and flows so well together, it speaks of passion, love and pain, beautiful and thanks for your comments, take care D-nyce
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Date: 9/23/2008 1:58:00 PM
This is excellent. I like your use of metaphor with the ocean in expression your emotional thrust. This flows very well and is quite descriptive. Great job! ~Joseph
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Date: 9/23/2008 6:58:00 AM
The read is ever flowing and composed with the greatest of imagery, though it conveys a sad feeling of longing, of the pain of a loss of love. Very well written. Michael
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Date: 9/23/2008 5:20:00 AM
Yes! It's much the same as drowning....great imagery! Thanks for "Brother Billy." This is the second time they've picked it. It must be really good, or the others really bad. Love, daver
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Date: 9/23/2008 3:28:00 AM
Wow! Ek voel jou pyn, en omdat ek self al deur die tipe hartseer is, raak hierdie gedig my baie. Stunning
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Date: 9/23/2008 2:37:00 AM
Nice work Heidie full of memorable images.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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Date: 9/22/2008 5:20:00 PM
Wow! Such a creative use of imagery to forward the sorrow of the narrator in this poem. What a fresh way to approach the topic. Thank you for sharing your talent with us and for your kind comments on my poetry. Keep on writing! Karen
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Date: 9/22/2008 4:45:00 PM
Wow I love the way you used nature toexpresse your sorrow!!! Excellent write Laura:)
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Date: 9/21/2008 7:33:00 AM
Memories can cause so many different emotions, but when we lose a loved one it doesn't seem fair sometimes that they leave their mark or memory. They can make us feel so used and dirty, kind of like an old dishrag. Heidie you put so much feelings into your writings, tears are a sad thing to have to call semi-precious souvenirs, Beautiful write, Ron
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Date: 9/21/2008 6:52:00 AM
Well, wow to your poem, and another wow to Sara's comment. She touched upon something that I get from you too, and I did not know how to express it. Although, I think you know how I feel. Your poetry is simply awe inspiring. The reader feels your ocean of pain so deeply here. You are brilliant and raw in your talent. And so much more. Love you, Shar xoxo
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Date: 9/21/2008 4:10:00 AM
Very sad. Keep writing it out - purging through the magic of words is so cathartic (i just wrote about this very thing - the magic of paper). Well done, love Kristin
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Date: 9/20/2008 10:02:00 PM
I am a seafarer. This appeals to me. Nice.
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Date: 9/20/2008 9:53:00 PM
A very beautiful poem of depth....I don't know what it is, but I feel there is much more to you than your words, a light within that burns brilliantly but one that you safely guard, because of the pain in life. Through your poetry, your readers get brief glimpses, which brings them back--to you!:) Would that your pain could be drowned in that ocean, but it doesn't work sp simply that way always. A slow, and choking process... Love always, Sara
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