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Ocean Haiku

dark storm clouds gather galloping waves crest the shore fish supper cancelled Ocean Waves Haiku contest Sponsored by Tania Kitchin 1/27/19

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/30/2019 6:42:00 PM

Love that galloping image, Jan. Way to go. Congratulations.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/17/2019 5:14:00 PM

thanks Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 1/29/2019 12:14:00 PM

Striking imagery, Jan, including an equally good jux. Congratulations on your podium finish. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 2/17/2019 5:14:00 PM

thanks Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 1/29/2019 10:43:00 AM

I like the twist in your haiku, Jan! Congrats on your win! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 2/17/2019 5:13:00 PM

thanks Laura I never know if its a proper haiku or not:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/29/2019 8:38:00 AM

Just love the denouement (whatever that Frog-word means, anyway). Great haiku; deserving winner in a contest with some very tough competition. :) gw

Jan Allison
Date: 2/17/2019 5:13:00 PM

thanks Gershon:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/29/2019 8:08:00 AM

- I'm back with congratulations, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 2/17/2019 5:13:00 PM

thanks Anne- Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 1/28/2019 9:18:00 PM

Hi Jan, Congratulations on your winning write:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 2/17/2019 5:12:00 PM

thanks Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier

Date: 1/28/2019 7:42:00 PM

Brilliant, Jan. Not everyone knows that you can't catch fish when it's too windy... or too dangerous to fish when a storm is abrewin'.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/17/2019 5:11:00 PM

thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Tania Kitchin

Date: 1/28/2019 7:42:00 PM

Sweet haiku Jan, maybe you had to settle for clams for supper :), congratulations on your winning placement!

Jan Allison
Date: 2/17/2019 5:12:00 PM

thanks for the inspiration Tania:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/28/2019 4:18:00 AM

- Gave me a smile ... take a sandwich ... - Love this one, Jan :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/28/2019 6:09:00 AM

I don't like beach picnics makes the word sandwich come true lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Pashang Salehi

Date: 1/27/2019 10:02:00 PM

Only you can put Haiku and Limerick together...

Jan Allison
Date: 1/27/2019 11:46:00 PM

I find the form challenging Pashang, not sure if the final line is a good enough twist for a haiku:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/27/2019 5:41:00 PM

Great image Jan, there's always fish fingers. Good luck. Tom.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/27/2019 11:44:00 PM

I struggled with the ending of the poem lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Pat Adams

Date: 1/27/2019 4:44:00 PM

Looks like it'll be back up beans and tators!!! I like this one Jan. brings forth an image, as it should, with that special "Jan" flavor! Well done! Good luck with the contest!...........pat

Jan Allison
Date: 1/27/2019 11:43:00 PM

Thanks Pat:-) hugs Jan xx