Oblivion

OBLIVION

I would be better off if 
I kept my mouth shut
but my burning lips open to reveal
waterfalls of guilty smut

I have a lot to say but will leave it
to those who have the ability 
to expose their complaints 
better than I can

Can I? 
Expose my complaints……

Sickening pessimistic hypocritical masters
Conservative communist apocalyptic bastards

Living in a sublime society who
have sucked and f ****d up
rehashing daily their greed
paving paths to hell

knowing this---no amount
of effort can save
my starving soul from
carefully constructed

OBLIVION






© Kim van Breda—1 October 2014

angercorruptionholocaustsymbolismfree verse

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Justin Bordner

October 22, 2014 at 8:43 PM

With your passion oblivion would banish you, the status quo fears you, and your influence upon the hearts you encounter keeps you a conspicuous force of excitment Kim..."Consrrvative, communistic, apocalyptic bastards.." remarkably accurate statement! J.A.B.

Kim Van Breda

October 23, 2014 at 2:45 AM

Hi There Mr. Justin A. Bordner. Thank you kindly for your intelligent, accurate, genuine and retrospective comments on my poems. Yes... I was very angry when I wrote this, but make no excuses. I write to get the emotions out.... oblivion being the metaphor :)

Timothy Hicks

October 20, 2014 at 2:01 AM

I appreciate your honesty. I try my best to be as genuine as I can when I leave feedback for people - for that's what I'd like others to do for me! There are pieces that I have written as well when in my darker moods that I don't show people. I suppose it's my vanity of having an "image to protect"... only human after all.

Timothy Hicks

October 19, 2014 at 1:46 AM

Wow, Kim... where did this come from?? A lot of rage in this piece... never would have expected coming from you. I can relate to the feelings, however... topics of war makes my blood boil. If it gets too much to handle it's important to remember that the world is full of darkness... but that darkness doesn't have to come from inside us.

Kim Van Breda

October 19, 2014 at 5:33 AM

Thanks for stopping by to read and comment Tim. You too, are a very observant interpreter and take time to post meaningful comments. Thank you. Yes.... well.... this particular poem I was in a very dark mood and on top of that it was the week that ISIS were beheading all those innocent children who would not conform to their ways. After posting, I was tempted to remove it, but then thought, I would not be true to myself if I just posted the poems that I thought others thought was the "me" that I am not all the time. Unfortunately, as I am sure you are well aware, every now and then the darkness seeps into us from the outside. Have a blessed Sunday Xx~Xx

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