Oasis

this dry wasteland
longs for your shades beneath
a copper of stars,
while those flowing eyes
become love’s oasis.



Tanka 3 of Andrea Dietrich
27 March 2015

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Sara Kendrick

April 2, 2015 at 3:02 PM

Great thought!!Congrats!! Sara

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

April 1, 2015 at 6:10 AM

oh I see congratulations.. I love the copper stars.. :)! stunning!//olive eloisa

Eve Roper

March 29, 2015 at 10:43 AM

Congratulations on your win a 7 Blessings eve

Mohan Chutani

March 28, 2015 at 11:46 PM

a lovely sensuous Tanka, Franco. Congrats. Mohan

Kp Nunez

March 28, 2015 at 12:51 PM

Lovely romantic tanka. Congratulations, Franco. Honored to share the tier with you. Kim :)

Carrie Richards

March 28, 2015 at 10:21 AM

How wonderful and lyrical !! A beautiful verse !! Congratulations !!

Constance La France

March 28, 2015 at 7:57 AM

Frank, congratulations on your wonderful win in the contest, a perfect 7 rating . . .

Jan Allison

March 28, 2015 at 5:49 AM

beautifully crafted tanka - many congrats:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

March 28, 2015 at 12:36 AM

this is gorgeous!! My only small critique would be where you left the preposition "beneath" at the end of line two. also, I think you meant "shade" although shades denotes colors, which is also a possibility. Anyway, this is so romantic. I loved it. congrats on my contest.