Oasis

Dawn arose The mule yawned We both in slumber Marched towards the water well Miles away, under suns torment The mule knew his drink was near I knew the labor was only half done Stubborn As was the mule We trekked back home My family now has one more day I took siesta Before the fields enslaved me Now at dusk I pray Fatigued I gaze at the constellations Hopeful and fearful Of another dawn

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/5/2014 11:01:00 PM

Simply excellent! The kind of poetry I come here to read Arthur. This vision will stay with me. #7

Kelly Deschler

Date: 12/5/2014 12:40:00 AM

Life can feel like being on an island with no hope of rescue, but that shouldn't stop us from trying and living how we want to... An interesting and unique poem this is, Arthur. Great work, as always!

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 12/4/2014 10:22:00 PM

beautifully painted oasis arthur

Casarah Nance

Date: 12/3/2014 8:40:00 PM

My applause will only be shadowed by everyone elses, but you have it anyways Sugar, love your style, and your ass. :)

Arthur Vaso
Date: 12/3/2014 8:44:00 PM

as I love yours!!! :)

Harry Horsman

Date: 12/2/2014 9:37:00 AM

another day and hopefully another poem from you Arthur,,like this

Arthur Vaso
Date: 12/3/2014 8:49:00 PM

Thanks Harry, I sure hope so too!

Kp Nunez

Date: 12/1/2014 7:36:00 PM

Stubborn as the mule, oftentimes we go our own way, hence the fear, hence we stray...Lightly delivered but deeply disturbing, such a great poem, that came from your pen deserves a Seven! Kim Patrice :)

Arthur Vaso
Date: 12/3/2014 8:48:00 PM

Thank you very much Kim

Nette Onclaud

Date: 12/1/2014 1:14:00 PM

this is one great journey into the deep core of poetry, Arthur... I was taken by the mystery and flow of your work.. huggs

Arthur Vaso
Date: 12/3/2014 8:48:00 PM

That's so sweet of you Nette, thank you so much!

Timothy Hicks

Date: 12/1/2014 2:01:00 AM

I agree with Andrea, there's an anticipation in this piece that's more poignant by it's subtlety. I imagine some Arabian-nights-like tale of someone trying to make a better life for himself, but got caught into some trouble along the way. Of course it's just speculation - it is just your words that leave me to wonder!

Arthur Vaso
Date: 12/3/2014 8:47:00 PM

Well Timothy, you got it bang on!!! I feel like I should give you a prize! Thanks!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 11/30/2014 11:46:00 PM

tranquil words but the message is the opposite.. :) wow only Arthur can drew..:) BUddy How are you??

Arthur Vaso
Date: 12/3/2014 8:45:00 PM

Thank you Olive buddy!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/30/2014 11:51:00 AM

this one really makes you feel some kind of doom on the horizon without really stating it. I like that a lot!

Arthur Vaso
Date: 12/3/2014 8:45:00 PM

Thanks Andrea!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/30/2014 9:03:00 AM

You have skills my friend and judging by this poem it seems you have a nice Ass as well. Did you name it Jack???

Arthur Vaso
Date: 11/30/2014 10:46:00 PM

LOL Now who is the comedian? I did make a slight reference to myself in there! :)

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 11/30/2014 5:38:00 AM

Marvelously interwoven with meaning so deep! Excellent dear, Arthur!

Arthur Vaso
Date: 11/30/2014 10:43:00 PM

Thanks so much Demetrios!!

Ken Carroll

Date: 11/29/2014 11:27:00 PM

Good slice of life write Arthur!

Arthur Vaso
Date: 11/30/2014 10:43:00 PM

Thanks Ken!

Eve Roper

Date: 11/29/2014 9:35:00 PM

Nice discription of the day in and day out, Artur. Blessings eve

Arthur Vaso
Date: 11/29/2014 10:20:00 PM

Thank you Eve!!

Paul Callus

Date: 11/29/2014 6:00:00 PM

That's life for you, Arthur! But then it's up to us to escape from that repetitive rut; there should be a time when we can look at a new day with pleasure not trepidation. (Why not give your mule a few days leave!!) :) // paul

Arthur Vaso
Date: 11/29/2014 10:20:00 PM

Thanks Paul, I was writing about the ones who have little choice in the matter!!

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 11/29/2014 5:01:00 PM

Very beautifully penned my dear friend Arthur! Dawn arose the mule yawned we both in slumber- very pretty! My favorite lines. I enjoyed it a lot! A 7 +++ from me! :) Have a lovely evening! Love and hugs! xxxx D

Arthur Vaso
Date: 11/29/2014 10:06:00 PM

Thank you kindly Dorian, you have a lovely evening too!!