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For Jared Pickett's Trois Par Huit.....Tanka.....Rondel Contest: It is fall and now I’ve tasted gall - prefaced by a final kiss from you. The moon, huge ball above that shines a golden hue, seems a sign auspicious - but oh, that is not true! Trenchant words you spilled; my heart is cleft. I’ve wept (beyond bereft) now you’ve left. Dear, can’t you recall how we’d thought our love would grow? Your touch would enthrall me through long days; moon’s warm glow - Where did summer’s solstice go? How will I ever find the wherewithal to hold on through each coming lonely night? My heart is hollow now, but holds no light, and autumn’s sky too soon will cast its pall. Abounding love and sun are gone. How small will be the days to come. How much less bright! How will I ever find the wherewithal to hold on through each coming lonely night? In fragrant blush of June, to garden wall I’d run, your sunflower smile in my sight. How can I stop my mind from taking flight - so lost in thought of when we had it all; how will I ever find the wherewithal?

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 11/14/2014 6:25:00 PM
Three forms, now isn't that fun. I am mixing a tanka, a haiku and a sonnet. I'm calling the new form Tan Ku Son! (You're Welcome Mom) Sad but Excellent write!
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Date: 4/18/2011 12:49:00 PM
I missed this gem of you Andrea!Waiting for a new gem from you---kash:)
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Date: 11/8/2010 12:50:00 PM
Congratulations Andre on second place in the contest, this poem is just terrific and wonderful.. love
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Date: 11/8/2010 7:06:00 AM
Congratulations on this well deserved win, Andrea
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Date: 11/7/2010 2:46:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Andrea in Jared Pickett's contest. Wishing you the best with your writing and winning in contests. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/7/2010 1:34:00 PM
Andrea ..well deserved second place in contest. Gud usage of all three forms Luv/Best wishes....Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 11/7/2010 12:37:00 PM
Congratulations Andrea on your well deserved win. Agape, Moses
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Date: 11/7/2010 8:27:00 AM
Congrats Andrea on your big win in Jared's contest with this superb entry so well written and enjoy your top spot for a top notch poem my friend with luv..
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Date: 11/7/2010 7:07:00 AM
So glad to see your poem getting well deserved recognition, Andrea. Congratulations! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/7/2010 4:22:00 AM
Andrea, hello my dear.... Sorry it took so long to judge this contest but I had a great deal of wonderful poetry for my most complicated contest yet.... All 20 contestants did a wonderful job but yours stood out as I knew it would.... Wonderful poem here friend and I look forward to your next entry..... Congrats....:JP]
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Date: 10/11/2010 1:01:00 PM
Sad lines, you've penned here, Andrea, but so well written! Enjoyed the read! And thank you for all your kind comments! Have a great week!...Love, Gert
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Date: 10/5/2010 12:18:00 PM
You can almost feel the ache of the sad heart who has to spend each night lonely. An excellent poem. Phyl
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Date: 9/28/2010 2:53:00 PM
oh, the things we miss, but should be reminiscing. its just so heartwrenching. but don't ever give up on it, because one day. . all that you long for in which you once had will be yours again and then it is sure to be complete. theres only little left to go, don't forget about it.(: hope you're well, Andrea. ~Always&Forever Lynette
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Date: 9/26/2010 5:18:00 PM
I love the repeated lines in your rondel Andrea. I like the change of tone as your poem progresses, a hint of bitterness in the trois par huit, then a melancholic wistfulness with such beautiful imagery ~ Sharon :)
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Date: 9/26/2010 8:11:00 AM
You have a to identify with our humanity ... this empathy shows that you being humanity too, have a sweeter self to it than many can claim to merit. Thanks for your read and comments on my poems, my friend.
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Date: 9/25/2010 11:08:00 PM
Page 4 for the winners list Andrea.. u got 11th that is why luv... talk tomorrow..
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Date: 9/25/2010 7:43:00 PM
Just beautifully done, Andrea! Such a feel of loss and loneliness! Yes, this is so well done! Best of wishes, hugs, kris
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Date: 9/25/2010 6:32:00 PM
A lonely poem Andrea.. like a beautiful memory of luv and golden reminisce ..good luck ..Jared will luv this one... he is supposed to post an example poem but birthday celebrations clouding his vision haha..luv..
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Date: 9/25/2010 4:49:00 PM
Like I said, you really made this work, wonderful wonderful job you did in Jared's challenging contest! I sure do hope this places high, you made it look easy-- eek I even wonder if I can write one? Especially enjoyed how you made this melancholic but still filled with imagery-- & I loved that- sunflower smile-- hugs to you!! I really have to go now... catch you later :)- nikko :)
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Date: 9/25/2010 3:04:00 PM
very nice good luck in the contest and have a great weekend faleshia
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Date: 9/25/2010 2:08:00 PM
Interesting write that should do well in the contest...Good luck..Have a great week-end...Yes, I saw this star or maybe it was a planet while the sun was in the early stage of setting and it looked green and very shiny to me...Sara
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Date: 9/25/2010 9:25:00 AM
Wow, Andrea you've overdone yourself! Great poetry you've penned here and best of luck in the contest!...Love, Gert
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Date: 9/25/2010 6:35:00 AM
Andrea. You are the greatest! This would make a wonderful song. I'm getting far behind, but will try to catch up. "So lost in thought of when we had it all." This is a mind stopper. Love, Dave
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Date: 9/25/2010 6:34:00 AM
Ouch ! This is a fantastic write ! Wonderful, just wonderful ! much love, james
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Date: 9/25/2010 5:29:00 AM
Very wonderful entry to the contest, Andrea, Good luck
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