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A Hypnagogic Dream Poetry Contest    N/A

Unrhymed iambic pentameter hypercatalectic: 5 hendecasyllabic (11 syllables) lines [*/|*/|*/|*/|*/|*]

*Please note that some people may pronounce “mischievous” with an additional syllable, resulting in the nonstandard pronunciation “miss-CHEE-vee-us”.

Distort of sounds strum his bow —sawed heart rhythms, mischievous fool impels my mind's rapt boredom. The devil's finger warns and pivots, sedates, adrift among alleged stolen dreamscapes. The jester sleeps all day, perplexed I awake.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023




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Date: 10/8/2023 1:28:00 AM
Hi Anaya. I loved the content, but check my soup mail for my feedback. Regards, Suzette
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I Am Anaya
Date: 10/8/2023 9:22:00 AM
That you Suzette! Very helpful. Can't rely on syllable counter for the word mischievous! I added the word 'rapt'.
Date: 10/1/2023 12:33:00 AM
Mischievous! Oh! Well i dont think i have the patience for meter, I do admire tho, i saw this contest and i was like whoa sounds tough n here u are writing like , breathing air! How clever u are and talented . I love the pictures uv used here and how uv described this dream, sometimes when one is sleepless we hear and see things, not there too, those stolen dreamscapes, and how jester sleeps all day, all so eloquently depicted! Soul stirring write this is! Absolute pleasure reading this
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I Am Anaya
Date: 10/1/2023 2:32:00 PM
One day I'd like to put the right words together, where it's easy for the reader to interpret, metered poetry eh. The images were necessary although, she won't see them. I hope I finish my poem on time for yours! Metaphors are for our dreams, yes? Thank you for your encouraging visits Ink Empress. <--Love that name..royalty!
Date: 9/30/2023 3:48:00 AM
i really like this, it's intriguing..i, too, dream very vividly, it's almost as if i have two different lives, and sometimes i have precognitive dreams..btw your comment on my poem brought me to tears, it's a poem in itself
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Date: 9/30/2023 8:18:00 AM
Twilight dreams have such an effect, that they move me to an unsettling distraction. Bringing you tears, more than I imagined, you are a sensitive soul, Charlotte
Date: 9/29/2023 3:32:00 PM
Trying to understand this.
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I Am Anaya
Date: 9/29/2023 5:53:00 PM
It's only a dream.
Date: 9/29/2023 8:36:00 AM
Night can bring nightmares, aimed at disturbing our calm lives.
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Date: 9/29/2023 9:22:00 AM
True, Victor, this one is about my persistent nemesis in my dreams. It's about "Hypnagogia" is the transition between wakefulness and sleep. Phantasma!
Date: 9/29/2023 2:02:00 AM
oh those mischievous fools.. maybe they are the Devil' spawn? Great entry for the contest.
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Date: 9/29/2023 9:16:00 AM
For sure, for sure. I'm staying in the Autumnal mood as Holloween beckons. Thank you, Silent One!
Date: 9/28/2023 10:49:00 PM
The photos really depicted the poetry well, Anaya. Your choice of words painted a collage of the photos. Well written, my friend and a good entry for the contest. Good luck! I think it will place well. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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I Am Anaya
Date: 9/29/2023 9:13:00 AM
I needed the images, since limited syllables and stressed syllables makes for less discription and more storyline. I think. Thank you, Bill!
Date: 9/28/2023 7:05:00 PM
This is so... mischievious. Oops! Did I spell that right? Heh. Seriously though, this is quite unique and creative. Now get some sleep
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Date: 9/29/2023 5:48:00 AM
Kewl
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I Am Anaya
Date: 9/28/2023 7:47:00 PM
You're my "Mister Brightside"
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I Am Anaya
Date: 9/28/2023 7:35:00 PM
In Calipso, you put the accent on the 'wrong' sy-'la'-ble. Lol I can't until I check under the floor planks in guest room. Asta Manana! ;)

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