Not Pretty In Pink

Just thirteen and already hiding,
capped off like an old oil well,
ears clamped shut 
with a musical flair of pink in a bush
    of unkempt hair.

Thirteen and all balled up
     like a tribble in a Star-Trek bin
rounded shoulders, head down tucked
nope, not, never
 getting into her skin.

Already hiding behind the glass
of frames too big for her head,
legs crossed,           sketchbook open
drawing the visions   inside her instead.

Capped teeth      with braces
if she only knew 
[though she seemed to guess, I’m sure]
lots of strut was needed, swagger, panache
all of which
 she abhorred.

Off she’s gone behind lashes of woe
brought on by who knows what, or who?
Like an old oil well,     she sits and waits
that is unless she blows?

Ears clamped shut blaring bloody what, 
              who knew?
Not pretty in pink, not petite, or polite
do you know her      I do.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Macfarlane Avatar
November 2, 2013 at 9:30 PM
Awesome insight Debbie! Being 13 is an awkward age and you described her to a tee. Great write and win! Hugs
Johnson Avatar
November 2, 2013 at 6:55 PM
If she only knew. She is probably beautiful in pink. Oh to be thirteen again and know what we know now. congratulations on a wonderful win. Love, Joyce.
Ryerson Avatar
October 31, 2013 at 2:02 PM
I THINK I know her and baby look at her now! Congrats cher - Tim
Rain Avatar
October 30, 2013 at 1:15 PM
Very interesting writing ! Congratulation's well deserved !!
A  Avatar
October 30, 2013 at 12:49 PM
DG~~loving the pink thoughts from your pen. Nice win.......... SKAT~~
Anglesey Avatar
October 30, 2013 at 12:43 AM
WOW, Debbie, an amazing write. So full of stark reality, sentiment and vivid imagery. Love this !
Ligon Avatar
October 29, 2013 at 9:00 PM
Very emotional. Great story. Congrats!
A   Avatar
October 29, 2013 at 8:40 PM
Debbie, I think I've seen this gal... Now she's blooming the world... nice win... LINDA
Guzzi Avatar
October 29, 2013 at 8:03 AM
Nope Chris it's a real person, I met her last year, she was perhaps 13. Thanks everyone.
Andresen Avatar
October 29, 2013 at 5:01 AM
- Always enjoyable to read your poetry - Today I want to congratulate your winning poem Debbie. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Bono Avatar
October 28, 2013 at 9:42 PM
very well deserved 1st place. congrats. Colleen
Britt Avatar
October 28, 2013 at 9:22 PM
Debbie. This is simply fabulous. There is so much here to interpret...this could and [is likely] as other's have said, most women; and yes, even some men in America. I half wonder though if this isn't inspired by one well known musical personality in particular. For some reason, Lady Gaga comes to mind. Just my musings. CTB
Adams Avatar
October 28, 2013 at 8:29 PM
gosh I see her on my bus every year...sometimes many at once... love this great poem...congrats on your big win :)
Richards Avatar
October 28, 2013 at 8:17 PM
Ah yes!!! Every girl knows her.....I think.there is a part of her inside every shy girl, who felt "left out" .......that painful child who maybe hasn't yet bloomed........but watch out when she does....she'll knock em' dead! I love this girl.
Macmillan Avatar
October 19, 2012 at 6:25 AM
WOW! Well, I know parts of her very well... ah, but the skin, the skin was always far too thin and everything just seemed to reach in and help itself. What a portrait you have painted. Hugs, Dee
Ryerson Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 4:51 PM
Of course I know her!...Molly Ringwald, right? No wait!...Debbie...Deb...Cher??...something like that?... I dunno I forgot now...probably wrong about BOTH anyway..Your poetry continues to astound - Tim
Guzzi Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 6:13 PM
no, no, not me..I may have been labeled an ugly duckling BUT I never curled in..I ALWAYS had a voice, and even if they got me crying I returned the favor by verbally ripping their faces off..NOT me above..
Ryerson Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 5:00 PM
And another thing...why do you insist on sponsoring contests asking for forms I'm lousy at?...It's a conspiracy, I just know it is!...Have a good one my friend...
Onclaud Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 11:13 AM
a difficult age that you so expressed well, debbie.. thnaks for including me on your recent contest... yes, i will join the new one.. lemme fix my brain, lol..
Nutter Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 8:58 AM
You bring out the insecurity of not feeling comfortable with ones self during the teen years so well in this write. New a lot of people like this.
Horsman Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 8:23 AM
Oh Deb, what can i say, just when i believe i've sus you out, you come up with a gem, if this is you, and i think it is.. you're a tresuré to behold...your second line first stanza, wow what can i say, it is so good.... beyond anything i can say!!!!!!!! but then it is the feeling i get when reading poetry i go by, and this is a classic!!!!!!
Horsman Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 8:25 AM
treasure Debbie, sorry about spelling
Collins Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 7:50 AM
Sounds good. I'll meet you there at 2:00.
Collins Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 7:26 AM
innocence may yet not be lost
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