Not His Time

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Poetic Form: Monorhyme

Inspired: 2023 December 07

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I am young but I have grown up some, and with a new job set up now, plus home and car all got up here, thanks to how I was brought up. Interviewed with the higher-up then, the foreman and I met up and, got things before I start up, turned, the crew gave me a thumbs up. The work, like my past jobs, speed-up so I had no time to warm up cause, 'twas busy now we're caught up in time for lunch, we all eat up. 'Twas a great first day as we wind up, ... byes and smiles that just lift me up.

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Ink Empress

Date: 12/8/2023 4:50:00 AM

Brilliant, you did this monorhyme in such a creative manner. Im sure it wouldnt have been easy coming up with lines that would end with “ up” but you’ve done it effortlessly with such deeply moving thoughts articulated in such eloquence. Pleasure reading this. As always. A brilliant write. If this is for the contest. Im sure will do very well.

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/8/2023 5:29:00 AM

Started as a duo-up, then three-syllables made it a soloist-up. Sponsor's rules change more than NFL Raiders change cities--can't keep up with 'um, 'Mirror's Cracked', thanks naytheless. Aloha, William

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/8/2023 4:14:00 AM

Creative and good use of one word. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/8/2023 4:55:00 AM

It sort of leans like Pisa--Shadow's a tough cookie. You're welcome. Aloha, William

Silent One

Date: 12/8/2023 2:27:00 AM

Interesting use of rhymes Hilo... Best of luck in this contest and always keep smiling..

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/8/2023 2:38:00 AM

I'll keep Liz's Mirror Cracked, 'twas interesting, too--Shadow's her own shadow. Aloha, William

Joe Maverick

Date: 12/7/2023 10:02:00 PM

I think this was more the life from the 1950s To the late 1990s Hilo..We are somewhere else Now.' Its change after change, yet the evil that Remains, there is good but that seems harder To action among us.' A good write on more Manageble times though.'

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/8/2023 12:37:00 AM

Goosey motherly bid 'tis Shoos bankrolled long ere' '50s On measure, course steads East West, as does Evil Good, each counterbalances the course Two great households, each can call upon any given time when they held the reins Standoff--no checkmate Tides as they oft do turns, my Quackery bid Biden?