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Not Dead Yet

caterpillars live
time in the dark...
laboring till a dawn of flight
and a past life to remember...
and, caterpillars don't understand
those choices that butterflies have...
the cognitions that are not as unwell but
wisdoms in children voices remembered...

Copyright © Sand Blown | Year Posted 2018

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Freddie Robinson Jr. Date: 8/22/2018 9:28:00 PM Beautiful, simply beautiful poem, sb! I agree totally w/Gerald ... very cerebral nuanced. A true thinking person's poem. Wonderful ink ruminations. Love and joy always. Login to Reply Sand Blown Date: 8/23/2018 11:44:00 AM thanks man...your compliments are an encouragement ...love and joy always freddie

Gerald Dillenbeck Date: 8/22/2018 11:23:00 AM Love this. Edgy, nuanced, simple, elegant. Sort of a Yin response to my own internal Yangishness. One point of curiosity. Next to last line. I trip up on "as unwell" I expected something about cognitions not yet experienced, opening out to the last line, wisdoms infinite infant voices remembered. Speaking of yangishness. Probably too much information when a simple thank you would be more appropariate. Login to Reply Sand Blown Date: 8/22/2018 12:35:00 PM thank you for the compliment and the mention of yin yang, as i've been working on an idea with respect to the philosophy of tai chi and needed a description of opposites...andt, the phrase "...not as unwell..." meant that the butterfly's state was normal and healthy and the child like voice contained wisdom..... i'll have to go back and reread your poem : )

Susan Ashley Date: 8/21/2018 10:11:00 PM Your poem captured me in the fascination of its beauty and deep thought, Sand. I truly enjoyed your thought provoking piece. Beautiful, inspiring and soulful. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan Login to Reply Sand Blown Date: 8/22/2018 12:45:00 PM thank you susan...as my mother-in-law nears one hundred she's less communications able, but there's a look in her eye that says 'I'm here'.

Caren Krutsinger Date: 8/21/2018 12:37:00 PM I am so thinking reincarnation here, Sand blown. Login to Reply Sand Blown Date: 8/21/2018 2:02:00 PM why not, if it's a logical answer to some religious paradox...i've always favored the idea myself, i mean if the math doesn't master the logic then find a new math...forgive me, just echoes of my teaching days : )

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 8/21/2018 11:42:00 AM Wonderful. Though confession, your title induced an "only a flesh wound" ;) and I totally get that 'not right'ness, I will have to come back. xomo Login to Reply Sand Blown Date: 8/21/2018 1:52:00 PM caterpillars to butterflies sounds freaky...but then, aging is an acceptance of "what happened...now i understand them and they me", oh...my cane : )

Adeniji Toluwalope Gideon Date: 8/21/2018 9:27:00 AM Beautifully adorned lines! Thumbs up Sand Blown Login to Reply Sand Blown Date: 8/21/2018 10:13:00 AM thanks...it took awhile, still not 'just right'...value of a thesaurus is that 'correct' words can bridge gaps