Nostalgia

colicky shadows sad mimes time wanders lover's treasured ballad a circuitous serenade melody familiar rolls echoing irretrievable lyrics that stay conscious and your absence this present offers stony pillows nights upon days an uncompelled heart following a paper plane's pathetic trajectory wakerife emptiness most indebted shamefully to dissatisfaction knives that cut thick and the unbearable balm of wounded cellos

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Brian Sambourne

Date: 3/15/2025 5:20:00 PM

You are a true poet. What a remarkably evocative final line - "the unbearable balm of wounded cellos." Images so original like "stony pillows." May your poetic pen keep its flourish.

Trina Layne
Date: 3/15/2025 6:53:00 PM

Appreciated. I have a musical background and I have dabbled with theatre in the past. I think that it helps with creating poetry. I tend to experience a lot of my pieces in a multi-dimensional way. Sometimes one or more senses might be predominant. Whatever those feelings and sensations are, I then try to use the best possible words to capture them as closely as possible.

Trina Layne
Date: 3/15/2025 6:53:00 PM

David Crandall

Date: 3/14/2025 8:46:00 PM

interesting, unique phrases (wounded cellos). I see that sad trajectory.

Trina Layne
Date: 3/15/2025 8:43:00 AM

I like to mix it up. Sometimes, it works. Originally, I thought about violins ... but somehow thinking about the cello's timbre (more sonorous and not as jarring as the violin) I felt it would work better for the mood.

thriveni c mysore

Date: 3/14/2025 6:59:00 PM

so controlled, so powerful. you have unique style with words dear friend. happy writing.

Trina Layne
Date: 3/15/2025 8:36:00 AM

Thanks for your feedback. It was inspired by Rick Parise's prompt. I think I will put that in the writer's notes now.