Phillip Chong Poet Elegy

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Stuck at the bottom 

I'm caving in. 

One thought of you not here 

Puts me in a claustrophobic nightmare. 

I can't wake up. 

I may not see you again. 

Reality isn't different from my sleep. 

I'm still running aimlessly away to nowhere. 

I'm so blinded. 

Every second is hidden that I'm spinning in circles. 

Makes me reckless, violent, purple dead. 

Over and over something's wanting me to say 

I was a creep for treating you that way. 

Can you forgive me? 

I promise I won't make you cry. 

One more chance I'll be a loyal friend. 

Walk to your door. 

I'm closing in. 

Standing on thin ice there's no turning back. 

I'll say it straight out without fumbling. 

For once in my life 

I confess it was a mess. 

Screwed up everything special we had planned. 

But now I'm here alone. 

Hope is my only invisible ally. 

I raise my white flag to the skies. 

Will you operate my wounded heart? 

The stakes are high. 

But I'm willing to continue where we left off 

If you have room in your heart for rent.

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Elaine George January 17, 2009 at 11:07 AM The heartbreak of losing someone you don't want to let go. Love the way you expressed it. congratulations on this wonderful feature of the week. Love and peace, Lainie

Raul Moreno January 14, 2009 at 3:17 AM Congratulations on your featured poem this week...Raul

Vince Suzadail Jr. January 12, 2009 at 7:47 AM Congratulations Phillip on your elegy being featured on Poetry Soup this week. Vince

Carol Sunshine Brown January 12, 2009 at 5:31 AM Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week. Love, Carol

January 11, 2009 at 2:33 PM Everyone deserves a second chance. Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. Keep on writing! Wishing you ongoing success. Karen

Carrie Richards January 11, 2009 at 1:48 PM This was so tender and from the heart! Congratulations on being featured with this poem! ~ Carrie

Sharon Winter January 11, 2009 at 12:28 PM An honest apology with hope from the heart. Congratulations on your featured write of the week. Love, Shar

Chitra Lakhera October 11, 2008 at 6:13 AM Oh the last line was so beautiful. Here, we have a saying that half of our sins are forgiven if we realize our mistakes and phillip I believe its long past since you realized it and also repent for it. So dear friend I'm sure things will work out for you very soon. Great poem. Blessings, Chitra

Christopher Higgins October 11, 2008 at 3:47 AM I love this poem and how it remained consistent throughout. I love the line hope is my invisible ally. You captured the honesty very well in this write.