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This poem was inspired by Becca Teagan's poem below.

missing thunder

It used to be him,  
now there is nothing inspiring 
just a closet full of colors

dresses I pull over disheveled hair
in the late afternoon, I twirl 
before a mirror, singing loudly

the lyrics of sappy songs
so I won’t hear his words
clawing at my brain

even storms
don’t like me anymore
and thunder used to be 
my only friend

https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/missing_thunder_929234

Lightning rarely strikes without thunder,
causing havoc in gloomy skies.
Humans can't control their plunder,
seeking shelter until the storm dies.

Once, I was your prince - full of charm
and you my willing Cinderella.
Kept you safe from storms that could harm,
just like a human umbrella.

We danced from spring until the fall
and laughed so much, until you cried.
Now here I stand, trying to recall,
that exact moment the music died.

Those eyes of soft chocolate brown,
gleamed with your sweet tender smile.
Now all you seem to do is frown,
and even a glance seems like a trial.

Its been such a long time
since my kiss made those lips quiver,
and my hands didn't commit a crime,
but now my touch makes you shiver.

To unlock those sad songs in your mind,
I couldn't sing the correct lyrics.
Still the right words, I struggle to find
as I love you, doesn't raise your spirits.

As our love begins to rot,
regret plants seeds of discontent.
Yet my love remains, but yours does not,
as you lose yourself in malcontent.

How ironic as you walk away,
the radio plays our special song.
I don't have the strength to make you stay,
after all, it would only be wrong.

Your ghost will linger in the gust
with memories that wish to remain.
When bridges burn, ashes turn to dust,
its difficult to erase this pain.

Silent One
Simple Musings
21 August 2017


Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 8/13/2019 1:08:00 PM
Hello Silent One, yes the pain takes awhile to leave. it takes time to heal. I like this poem. It takes time to find the someone special. You must leave the past behind. have a nice day my friend.
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Date: 6/7/2019 10:57:00 AM
I love the rhymes-- they made the poem more special, not less, which is sometimes difficult
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Date: 4/16/2018 4:30:00 PM
So much pain in your words ...as if they were written in tears. You squeeze the very heart of me S1.
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Date: 4/9/2018 7:46:00 AM
I KNOW HOW MUCH IT PAINS.....There will be only tears which you will long to hide from everyone my friend. You will always wish that it was raining and no one can see you cry.... But still no rain and some day the tears will just dry...
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Date: 4/9/2018 7:35:00 AM
i KNOW HOW EXACTLY THE PAIN IS
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Date: 2/28/2018 6:56:00 AM
The first stanza caught my attention with its flow, rhythm and rhyme. Your theme is continued throughout and it has a sadness but yet there seems to be a hope for healing. Thanks for all your visits to my page. Sara
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Silent One
Date: 2/28/2018 6:57:00 AM
Thank you Sara...
Date: 2/27/2018 4:07:00 PM
Ghosts and lost loves always haunt a romantic soul. Through longing and loss we can discover the strengths within our souls.
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Silent One
Date: 2/27/2018 4:09:00 PM
Thanks Kelli..
Date: 2/27/2018 3:56:00 PM
This writing is so captivating from start to end every verse, just amazing. :) Best regards, Melania
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Silent One
Date: 2/27/2018 4:00:00 PM
Thank you Melanie..
Date: 2/27/2018 3:55:00 PM
Heavens, Silent one! You are a Rock Star poet.....you made my day with this one. Hugs
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Silent One
Date: 2/27/2018 3:58:00 PM
Thank you... You should read Becca Teagan's original poem which inspired it called missing thunder.
Date: 2/2/2018 8:55:00 AM
I just love this poem!
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Date: 1/14/2018 10:38:00 PM
Can't help rereading this...
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Date: 12/20/2017 11:14:00 AM
Very nice! Anyone who has loved and watched that love die and didn't know why will appreciate this.
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Date: 11/3/2017 1:24:00 PM
Very nicely worded. Enjoyed reading this. I'll have to look out my poem on a storm and see if I can post it here - it may be too long. It's a great topic for poetry, very easy to bring images to mind. Well done. xx
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Date: 10/29/2017 1:37:00 AM
Wow, this poem is so nice. Very well written Silent One.
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Date: 10/28/2017 9:42:00 PM
Wow you've created such a fine masterpiece. Your metric rhyming is perfectly accomplshed and your message speaks volumes, though sad...there is nonetheless within my mind as in what one sow will reap. Love, relationship require nurturing....too much hurt destroy love.
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Date: 10/18/2017 3:14:00 PM
Out of the cliche topic, you created a winner!
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Date: 10/9/2017 10:06:00 AM
Speak of "talent"! Exceptional, Silent One. Thank you for reading and leaving encouraging comments on some of my work...truly appreciate that. Yes, true love hurts like hell, but I really believe that "Love is all". This one definitely goes to my favorites...will be reading more for sure. Have a great week! Annalise~*~
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Date: 9/22/2017 9:14:00 AM
Very deep write Silent One, almost like you were screaming inside. Blessings
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Date: 9/20/2017 9:26:00 PM
Love is so fickle.
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Date: 9/20/2017 1:56:00 PM
Hello SO, Very well-done and marvelously articulated with just the perfect mix of imagery, emotions, and rhythm and rhyme. And your last stanza is the one that pulls the whole theme together with its obvious haunting and morose tone and meaning. Very sad and quite touching. Outstanding!! A FAVE!! Cheers and Best, Gary
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Date: 9/19/2017 11:54:00 AM
Hi SO, as love songs go this is a beautiful duet. Beccas poem does inspire me also and what a worthy answer Its like the call /answer of two birds of opposite sex. The hurt is palpable . Wow.
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Date: 9/19/2017 5:30:00 AM
"To unlock those sad songs in your mind, I couldn't sing the correct lyrics. Still the right words, I struggle to find as I love you, doesn't raise your spirits." I really like this verse. This is what I call true emotion. Thanks for sharing....................peace!
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Date: 9/17/2017 9:16:00 PM
Simple...simply brilliant :) So true to life, just as thunder and lightening go together, so do love and pain. I can really feel this one, thanks for writing it.
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Date: 9/16/2017 9:41:00 AM
Oh so heavy and brooding, this piece really played my emotions. Brilliantly penned.
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Date: 9/16/2017 12:05:00 AM
So nice. Whatever you compose, it touches excellence.
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