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No More Sandcastles

Please Daddy, can we build just one more
Just one more castle on the ocean’s door
Build a sandcastle better than all before
Can we build one more before we leave the shore

I can still hear her begging me in that soft, sweet voice
As if as her Daddy I even had a choice
There is nothing I wouldn’t do for her as her eyes grew moist
So, more sand in the bucket I would start to hoist

But summer days soon gave way to boys
And sandcastles were forgotten like her dolls and toys
The sounds of rolling waves were just background noise
Daddy couldn’t entice her to join me with vacation ploys

Before I knew it we were worlds apart
I sat alone on the beach with a heavy heart
The formation of a sandcastle I couldn’t even start
Without my daughter beside me to share in the art

The castles she chased were ruled by bogus kings
She kept reaching for the next golden ring
She found solace in drugs and in other things
Now in a plane, a coffin, her body brings

Please Daddy, can we build just one more
Just one more castle on the ocean’s door
Build a sandcastle better than all before
Can we build one more before we leave the shore


by Joe Flach

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 5/19/2012 1:13:00 PM
Hello Joe, You have certainly captured everyone's heart with this very sad, but very lovely poem. From your pain came unforgettable words. I will not forget them. Congratulations on your win ...Samia
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Date: 5/19/2012 12:28:00 AM
Sandcastles all too often, like human relationships, get washed away by the sea, but your poem never will Joe. It will be something to treasure forever. Congratulations.
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Date: 5/18/2012 6:10:00 PM
gut wrenching Joe *tear* Congratulations on your win...'Seas the day' ;) big hugs, love ya deb
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Date: 5/18/2012 5:26:00 PM
So sad Joe and to some extent true for all parents [hopefully NOT the ending!] Congrad's on your big win! Light & Love
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Date: 5/18/2012 4:18:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement in Gail's "Sandcastles" contest Joe. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/18/2012 3:35:00 PM
wow Joe this a heart breaking, wonderful poem, wonderful yet so sad. harry
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Date: 5/18/2012 11:18:00 AM
So sad and haunting. Congratulations.
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Date: 5/18/2012 10:40:00 AM
I loved this when i first read it and it still gets me Congratulations Joe and thanks for your help xx
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Date: 5/18/2012 10:21:00 AM
Joe congrats on your win, well done..David
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Date: 5/18/2012 10:00:00 AM
A deep poignant write Joe....you are an amazing writer. Hugs
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Date: 5/9/2012 12:16:00 PM
Touching....but so beautiful poem Joe - I will not forget this for a while, it will stay in my heart. - Thank you Joe. - Wish you luck in contest, it have to be a win poem. - oxox love Anne-Lise
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Date: 5/9/2012 8:18:00 AM
Oh Gosh Joe this is so sad, xx A tear I feel upon my cheek For the love of our children we all do seek We do what we can to help them through life We are there to deal with trouble and strife No parent should their child outlive We know we would prefer ourselves to give.
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