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No Hero To My Heart

He opened the door I did th sin Against all wills I let him in Chaining a heart Choking the pulse Robbing a life 3 crimes unfalse Me,right here Just the one to blame "Dont hate the player Hate the game" He said he's changed Said:"Never again" Said i was important Love for who i am But my crimes Was nothing but letting my only pump in rape I just parked my life At the sidewalk today.

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Charmaine Chircop

Date: 6/23/2009 1:51:00 PM

love the way you presented this poem like a walking stairs---this is deep----"dont hate the player,hate the game",love for who i am",powerful write--the will of a person not to commit crime and sin,then he sins again,though he commits the crime,there s still some light in this person,lets give him a chance love him for who he is...then maybe he change----------awesome-----------charma

Charlene Bird

Date: 6/23/2009 10:58:00 AM

These are some powerful verses, and the form is interesting, which makes me think of someone who continues to fall of the wrongs they have done. Great work!

Nathaniel Köhp

Date: 6/23/2009 10:09:00 AM

Thanks for reading my poem "Insecurity". I'm glad it made sense to you. Now, as for this poem! I love the way it's shaped in those chunks, it makes it read like the narrator is almost choking on words and each chunk is separated by a heartbroken pause. The narritive itself reminds me of something which happened to me once. It wasn't anything at all shocking or scarring, but a Bell Jar esque Buddy Willard moment. If you get that reference. My poem reached you and yours reached me, thank you. :D

Jay Loveless

Date: 6/23/2009 4:17:00 AM

Amazing Love. Been Here Done This. I Love How You Get It To Flow Into Words. Peace. Kisses. Boo. PS. Your Writing Gets Better Day By Day. Dont Give Up. Ever. <3

Oleg Borisov

Date: 6/22/2009 1:42:00 PM

I like your daring, Sajdah P.S. Thanks for being my regular reader. It flatters me.

Colin Mitchell Williams

Date: 6/22/2009 1:05:00 PM

"But my crimes Was nothing but letting my only pump in rape"... amazing line Sajdah, the whole poem seems pent up on a tragedy... good work Sajdah

Sebastian Aaron Baez

Date: 6/22/2009 11:25:00 AM

....interesting...