Reason A. Poteet Poet Tanka

No Fireworks Tonight

first version:

raw sparks of anger
loss of self-control
my fuse is lit
one thing circumvents my rage 
our son's eyes, all over me

version two:

raw sparks of anger
loss of self-control
my fuse is lit.
no fireworks tonight
our son's eyes, all over me


written 11 June 2016

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Andrea Dietrich April 14, 2017 at 7:23 PM wow, REason. what a statement this makes. This is GOOD tanka!!!! Congrats on the winners' list. Reason A. Poteet April 15, 2017 at 1:17 PM Thank you, Andrea, written parent to parent, spouse to spouse. I appreciate the comment. I think I'll edit the third line to read in present tense like a haiku should. That way the tanka will be an extension of the haiku within.

Lukas Ficklin April 14, 2017 at 2:48 PM Natural stress relief - pure love! congrats! Reason A. Poteet April 14, 2017 at 5:09 PM Thanks, Lucas. You bet, a father changed but still tempted by former habits and overcoming the rage. A miracle, a welcome change. Appreciate the comment.