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No Fireworks Tonight

first version: raw sparks of anger loss of self-control my fuse is lit one thing circumvents my rage our son's eyes, all over me version two: raw sparks of anger loss of self-control my fuse is lit. no fireworks tonight our son's eyes, all over me written 11 June 2016

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/14/2017 7:23:00 PM

wow, REason. what a statement this makes. This is GOOD tanka!!!! Congrats on the winners' list.

Reason A. Poteet
Date: 4/15/2017 1:17:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea, written parent to parent, spouse to spouse. I appreciate the comment. I think I'll edit the third line to read in present tense like a haiku should. That way the tanka will be an extension of the haiku within.

Lukas Ficklin

Date: 4/14/2017 2:48:00 PM

Natural stress relief - pure love! congrats!

Reason A. Poteet
Date: 4/14/2017 5:09:00 PM

Thanks, Lucas. You bet, a father changed but still tempted by former habits and overcoming the rage. A miracle, a welcome change. Appreciate the comment.