Nit Picks and Picnics

~~Upon the banks of big piney slough,
   I recall a picnic with old blue,
   and my granddaughter at age two.
   and many blood sucking critters too.

~For a very short while we did picnic,
   then we would bait our hooks and pick ticks. 
   while the ants carried our food off in nit picks.
   Gets no better than this, can’t beat it with sticks!

~Mosquitoes demanded their rightful share,
   for of the blood of we humans they are an heir.
   Some dudes have no flair for this type of affair,
   after a day or two they would need repair.

~Moms who let babies grow up to be rednecks,
   raise children who can fish and pick blood ticks,
   and kill big water moccasins with little sticks,
   while picking polk salet for supper on picnics.

~Having caught a big flathead cat or two,
   I called granddaughter Sue and my dog blue,
   for I remember quit clearly when Sue was new,
   was the dog days of summer, ninety two! 

   For and in Honor of: Carol Brown
   And Contest: Picnic
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Dietrich Avatar
May 20, 2011 at 10:55 PM
this one SO deserved to get a top rank. Congratulations, john!
Devonshire Avatar
May 19, 2011 at 9:42 AM
Dear John, Congratulations on your win in Carol's Picnic Contest. Love, Carolyn
Phookan Avatar
May 19, 2011 at 8:23 AM
This is a great one on picnic John..Congratulations on your big win.gautami
Johnson Avatar
May 18, 2011 at 11:24 PM
Thanks John for comment on my place in the contraption little brown frog from under a log will get cod fish a snapping see ya mate Don
Poet Avatar
May 18, 2011 at 11:14 AM
Congrats john on your big win in the contest.
Johnson Avatar
May 18, 2011 at 9:05 AM
Congratulations John on your win with this hilarious picnic fare . Love, Joyce
Onclaud Avatar
May 18, 2011 at 7:52 AM
breezy, moe... love your take on this with winning huggggs! :)
Richards Avatar
May 18, 2011 at 7:46 AM
Love this enjoyable memory....nothing is better than spending a day in the great outdoors with a beloved grandchild...(even with those nasty critters biting!!) We get mosquitoes here too...but sure doesn't stop us from enjoying nature!!
Song Avatar
May 18, 2011 at 7:44 AM
Oh yeah! Top of the food chain once again dear friend!! Keep the writes coming! Fun to get to know u thru your poetry! Gwendolen
Soulfire Avatar
May 18, 2011 at 7:41 AM
Congrats on your win John. Fun poem.
Horne Avatar
May 18, 2011 at 7:15 AM
Many congrats on both your wins, John : )
Taylor Avatar
May 18, 2011 at 6:58 AM
Congrats on your win, Moses. Excellent piece. Nice going. Ralph
Mehta Avatar
May 18, 2011 at 6:57 AM
Congratulations on the third place win in the contest of carol, John
Long Avatar
May 18, 2011 at 6:48 AM
nicely written. I have enjoyed it! congrats on your win! cory
Sweetheart Avatar
May 18, 2011 at 4:59 AM
Congrats Moses on your wonderful win in the picnic contest with this most delightful entry my friend.. also your superb reply which I will address today... thankxx and enjoy your top spot with luv..
Brown Avatar
May 18, 2011 at 4:48 AM
Congratulations on your winning poem placing in my contest Moses. Love, Carol
Susan Avatar
May 16, 2011 at 7:42 AM
A very good entry for the contest! So descriptive I felt like I was there!
Durbin Avatar
May 15, 2011 at 8:51 AM
I know Carol will love this humorous entry as much as I do!
Song Avatar
May 14, 2011 at 7:22 PM
John- You have been taking the poetry audience on many cool adventures lately--here is another! ONe question for you-Does everyone in your life have to rhyme?....Sue...dog named Blue..ha ha. I think I closed out this picnic contest a few hours ago with a quickie write. I wish u the best in this one too! Gwendolen
K. Avatar
May 14, 2011 at 5:18 PM
What a very enjoyable entry to read for the contest (ok minus the blood suckers, those sure can ruin any picnic) but very wonderful memories you share here, John :) wonderful entry for the contest :)
Devonshire Avatar
May 13, 2011 at 2:37 PM
Hey John, may subliminally I was hoping the turkey would put Pete to sleep so I didn't have to fend off his romantic advances. You are quite clever. Hmmm...could there be truth to this meat selection on the part of a naive Nelly? Love you, Carolyn
Devonshire Avatar
May 13, 2011 at 2:02 PM
You had me giggling thinking of the ants carting off bits of your picnics while the mosquitoes were thinking of themselves as "heirs" to our blood, John. Some folks mock rednecks, but they are brought up with great survival skills. Guess Sue is about 11 now and I hope your next picnic with her is more enjoyable. Great entry for Carol's contest -- winning wishes coming your way! Love and blessings, Carolyn
Onclaud Avatar
May 13, 2011 at 11:31 AM
refressshing, moe! savored every vivid moment of your adventure! winning's best! :) huggs, nette
Onclaud Avatar
May 13, 2011 at 11:31 AM
refressshing, moe! savored every vivid moment of your adventure! winning's best! :) huggs, nette
Sweetheart Avatar
May 13, 2011 at 5:21 AM
Another invigorating write Moses my friend.. enjoyed every verse as if I were right there on this picnic u penned so well..good luck in the contest.. going with grandkids is so fun.. we are taking our three to Disneyland in August.. oh.. cannot wait..luv..
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