Niskriti Translated As Finally Saved

Giant poet gem, Tagore’s story-poem: NISKRITI,
Is a piazza perched paved and perfectly paced beauty;
Scale model of a castle of vast poetic kingdom,
That has spread into an empire of Indian wisdom!

Manjulika is a dew-drop in the mighty ocean,
Of the land of Bay of Bengal where feminine gender; 
Fulfills wants of men as mother, wife, daughter and labors,
Less fulfilled of subtle cravings, in her heart she harbors!

Nucleus firm; Malabika has solemnly sung it, 
Narration, like roots, stems, leafs, flowers, fruits of plants well-knit!
Images complex extract emotions, expose like day light,
Questions of destiny hang, like stars in dense dark sky, bright!

Figures of speech, like hand-picked coffee-seeds, well chosen,
And like gems and pearls in an ornament, fairly woven;
With stones of words and verses flat, oval, blunt, round, pear, square,  
The edifice erected here is stern, solemn and somber!


05 December 2021 
Inspired By A Translation Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Malabika Ray Choudhury
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Ray Choudhury Avatar
December 14, 2021 at 6:25 AM
Dear Christuraj - revisiting to tell you that you can choose any title for your poem. I only asked for the information. If you do like to keep the title, that's alright too. I am honoured! Warmest wishes ~ Mala
Ray Choudhury Avatar
December 14, 2021 at 5:59 AM
Dear Christuraj, what a beautiful poem you have created, inspired by Tagore's poem "Nishkriti". I am so honoured that you have used my translation as the inspiration. This story about an unfortunate, but strong girl in 19th century India has really touched your heart. It's really sad that you forgot to enter this gem to the contest. Doesn't really matter - your creation stays, and will be admired for ever. Congratulations for creating such a great piece of poetry! A fave for me. Love and blessings ~ Mala
Jayasankar Avatar
December 14, 2021 at 2:35 AM
So well penned... Hearty congratulations Chris... God bless... ~ Ani
Rose  Avatar
December 5, 2021 at 1:26 PM
Your hand picked words are like gems to my eyes Chris, well done
Alex Avatar
December 5, 2021 at 11:28 PM
Thank you very much.
Dietrich Avatar
December 5, 2021 at 11:55 AM
very well done, Mala!! I hope I can figure this contest out myself!
Alex Avatar
December 5, 2021 at 11:28 PM
Thank you very much.
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