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Example for my contest. I call it a Charonnet (lol)

PS: My mother actually died 30 years ago at the early age of 61, so this is not about my mother. But somewhere out there I'm sure someone's mother has died at age 99. R.I.P. whom ever that be.

I will post my contest shortly.

Note:This is not the traditional Sonnet

Ninety-Nine Years

I smiled, when my mother had died 
I knew, her death was soon to be 
Ninety-nine years...so oft, she cried 
Not for herself, she cried...for me 

Someone waiting, dad, I suppose 
At gate...with an "Never-Die" rose 
Finally, pain she suffered...no more 
Lord, has her soul, thy...to adore 

When my mother had died, I knew 
Her death was soon to be, I smiled 
So oft, she cried...not for herself 
She cried, for me...ninety-nine years 

Just one more year, I wished...she had 
I'm sorry, but feeling...bit sad

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Robert Lindley

Date: 10/6/2020 5:04:00 AM

Great sonnet my friend... In my hometown lived a couple, he lived to age 101, she to age 100... Both were faithful Christians... Death and Life, we in weaken flesh must pass away in order to be reborn into eternity.. A fav.. a gem.. God bless..

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/23/2020 3:51:00 AM

I hope that whoever's mom did not have to cry for their child 99 years. I hope she was delighted in them and that they brought her joy. I had an aunt that lived 98 years and 3 months. People don't live to be so old most of the time so she was blessed with a long life. Enjoyed reading your work. Sara

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 9/3/2020 5:28:00 PM

G'day Charles ... sad indeed, but ninety-nine years; a wonderful lifetime indeed. Thank you Charles - Lindsay

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 9/3/2020 9:45:00 AM

Wonderful form you have created ..i would give it a try...

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/2/2020 10:43:00 AM

Welcome back, Charlie! So glad to see you here again. I'm going to try the contest. The emotion in your poem is overwhelming. I have a 102-year-old friend and wish she could live forever. Beautifully penned example for your contest! Hugs, Carolyn

Olusegun Arowolo
Date: 9/3/2020 9:49:00 AM

Carolyn , I wish your friend many years ahead....

Jan Allison

Date: 9/2/2020 5:50:00 AM

what a fascinating form you have created, will see if i can rise to the challenge:-) hugs jan xx

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 9/1/2020 9:59:00 AM

Charles nice to see your new posting and the contest! Good example and such a lovely sad poem!! Need to figure out the swapping bits! Would be good if you could Put some more details in!