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Nine-Eleven

far across country
smoke drifts..cries reverberate
sitting  mesmerized
bewildered, mutely frightened
taste word...terrorist

No. 1 in Carolyn's contest.

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Gwendolen Song

September 15, 2011 at 5:36 PM

Congrats, Carol...your last line drew an image of so much dust in the air that you couldn't avoid getting it in your mouth...hence, taste terrorist. Very concise wording...great tanka! Gwendolen

Michael J. Falotico

September 15, 2011 at 5:25 PM

Congraonderful piece.. always Michaelts to Joyce on this w

Jack Horne

September 15, 2011 at 3:48 PM

Awesome write. Many congratulations to you, Joyce : )

Black Eyed Susan

September 15, 2011 at 1:18 PM

i think you really captured the moment and with this one joyce. we were all bewildered for sure. i love the ending too - tasting the word - simply brilliant. congrats on your win :)

Bob Quigley

September 15, 2011 at 11:00 AM

Congratulations on your 1ts place win Joyce. "far across country" is so appropriate.

Sara Kendrick

September 15, 2011 at 10:10 AM

Congrats on your win in Carolyn's fine contest..Sara

Caryl Ramsdale

September 15, 2011 at 3:00 AM

My favorite line "taste word...terrorist". We as a country were exposed as never before. Outstanding combination of words my friend. Congratulations on your 1st place win. Cr

Lee Ramage

September 15, 2011 at 12:04 AM

Excellent, just wish we didn't have to the know the word. Love Lee

Nette Onclaud

September 15, 2011 at 12:02 AM

top of the heap, joyce..sunniest congrats on your most special win :) huggs

Margaret Foster

September 14, 2011 at 9:50 PM

Congratulations on your win Joyce. Not a lot of words but saying so much. well done. Marg

Iolanda Scripca

September 14, 2011 at 8:29 PM

Congratulations on your top win, dear Joyce! Best, iolanda

Kim Merryman

September 14, 2011 at 8:19 PM

Congrats on your 1st place win, Joyce! Kim

Dr.Ram Mehta

September 14, 2011 at 8:10 PM

Congratulations on the first place win in the contest of Carolyn, Joyce

Carrie Richards

September 14, 2011 at 4:54 PM

That new word, which now seems too commonplace...such an ugly word it is. Excellent entry to Carolyn's contest, Joyce! Congratulations

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

September 14, 2011 at 3:37 PM

Congrats Joyce on a fantastic first place win ...

Debbie Guzzi

September 14, 2011 at 2:45 PM

yes our turn to reap...Congrad's light & love

David Williams

September 14, 2011 at 2:45 PM

hey Joyce congrats on your win, all entries were sensitively done..David

John Freeman

September 14, 2011 at 2:37 PM

I wish I could say beautiful, Joyce, but the scene was anything but beautiful. However, a quite worthy Tanka was to rank first place. Congratulations Joyce. Agape, Moses

Carol Sunshine Brown

September 14, 2011 at 2:05 PM

Congratulations on your well deserved win Joyce. Love, Carol

Carolyn Devonshire

September 14, 2011 at 1:30 PM

Joyce, your poem captured all of the feelings from that moment -- bewilderment, mesmerized, crying. Indeed the "smoke" or impact drift far across the country. Outstanding tanka! Congratulations on your first-place win. Love, Carolyn