Nightfall Daybreak Lune

Nightfall Daybreak Lune

Nightfall

Chimeras creep ‘cross
Falling dusk
In stumbling trances

Daybreak 

Ragged eventide shrouds
Burst open in golden light
Night angst flees

“Joy comes in the morning.” Ps. 30:5

Lune
Nightfall -Haiku One 5-3-5 Syllables
Daybreak -Haiku Two 3-5-3 Words

Syllables checked in howmanysyllables

10-18-21
Contest: Lune
Sponsor: William Kekaula
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Alex Avatar
October 28, 2021 at 10:38 PM
Great comparison, contrast, and linking. Congratulations!
Kauffman Avatar
October 29, 2021 at 9:48 AM
Thank you so much Chris. I think the essence of a Lune is, as you say, the linking of comparison and contrast - you put that so well, much better than I could express. It took me awhile to figure that out! So glad you enjoyed this write. Sending you blessings!
Ashley Avatar
October 28, 2021 at 8:54 PM
My Dearest Rhyme Time friend, it is my absolute pleasure to revisit this spectacular poem and offer my heartfelt congratulations. Your excellent win in William’s contest is richly deserved. Your enchanting pen never fails to leave me spellbound, sweet Sam. Sending you warmest wishes and hugs on golden beams of sunrise.. ~Susan
Kauffman Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 10:32 AM
My dearest Rhyme Time friend, it is not often that one finds a kindred spirit - a friend who shares the bounty of their talent and without thought of self inspires a companion on the journey. As you say it is the "magic of inspiration." I call myself blessed to be among your friends and cherish that precious friendship! Sending you blessings in the golden light of friendship!
Ashley Avatar
October 29, 2021 at 4:40 PM
My dearest Rhyme Time friend, I am humbled and so very honored.. I am also left breathless from the generous spirit of your words. Thank you for sharing your amazing friendship with me, Sam. To be part of the awakening of each other's creativity is the greatest gift poets can share.. thank you for sharing in the magic of inspiration with me. You are an inspiration to myself and many others here.. You, my sweet Rhyme Time friend, are cherished as is your magnificent pen.
Kauffman Avatar
October 29, 2021 at 9:55 AM
Dearest Rhyme Time friend, sending you many thanks and much gratitude for your lovely note of congratulations. It is an honor to be on the winners list with so many exceptional Lunes and your note adds to that joy in a very special way. I have to tell you that your Sand Lune was the guiding golden light into this new form. It is brilliant! It left me breathless with its exquisite contrast and comparison. I get so inspired by the amazing results flowing from your magic pen dear friend! You are a blessing! Sending you blessings on wings of a golden dawn!
Peck Avatar
October 28, 2021 at 12:38 PM
Sam, Love your Daybreak... especially. "Ragged eventide shrouds..." So beautifully descriptive. Congratulations on your placement!
Kauffman Avatar
October 29, 2021 at 9:43 AM
Hi Ann! Many thanks for your up-lifting message. So glad you enjoyed this write. It is an honor to have this poem on the winners list among so many amazing poems. Took me awhile to get my head around the new form. Hope your "frig remodel" is going smoothly! Sending you blessings!
Goldsmith Avatar
October 28, 2021 at 11:59 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful win. Have a blessed autumn day...........................
Kauffman Avatar
October 29, 2021 at 9:37 AM
Thank you dear Paula! Sending you a harvest of blessings in this amazing season of abundance!
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
October 28, 2021 at 8:27 AM
The 2nd stanza sounds like a missing piece of a Cat Stevens rendition, Sam, an admirable executed Lune my friend, my compliments for your great efforts and placement, Aloha!
Kauffman Avatar
October 29, 2021 at 9:36 AM
William, thank you not only for your placement but for creating this delightful new poetry form! I was so honored by your placement among such wonderful, uniquely creative, entries and even more honored by your comparison to Cat Stevens - one of my favorite (gone to quickly) singer-songwriters. Made me think of Moonshadow! Sending you all the blessings of the season. Aloha dear friend!
Allison Avatar
October 28, 2021 at 5:31 AM
lovely imagery and use of alliteration, Many congrats on your win Sam:-) hugs Jan xx
Kauffman Avatar
October 29, 2021 at 9:23 AM
Jan, thank you so much! Had a hard time getting my head around this new form but I am so pleased to be among the winners who wrote such outstanding poems! Hugs! :D
Dietrich Avatar
October 20, 2021 at 4:54 PM
Your lune is spectacular!! Truly. One of the best!!
Kauffman Avatar
October 29, 2021 at 9:19 AM
Thank you so much Andrea! Once I got the hang of the format had a wonderful time creating the imagery and scene for this Lune. It's a fun format. Take care! Blessings!
Ashley Avatar
October 20, 2021 at 8:30 AM
Dear Rhyme Time friend, even the night can’t dim the brilliance of your gifted pen which gleams in precious tones of golden daybreak. The last lines of each Lune are grand finales to superbly presented imagery of dusk and dawn. Simply splendid! Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you, sweet Sam.. ~Susan
Kauffman Avatar
October 29, 2021 at 9:15 AM
My dearest Rhyme Time friend, your lovely message is like a golden dawn - uplifting my spirits and bringing the joy of a beautiful sunrise into my day! Sending rays of sunlight in gratitude dear friend for your day along with a bounty of blessings!
Jones Avatar
October 20, 2021 at 1:06 AM
Wonderfully penned haikus!
Kauffman Avatar
October 29, 2021 at 9:10 AM
Thank you so much Karen! I have found the format of haikus to be a delightful writing challenge especially for one like me with the verbose gene! All the best!
Sands Avatar
October 19, 2021 at 7:00 AM
Wow! Excellent Sam! I love that last line too..night angst flees I find that to be very freeing :)
Kauffman Avatar
October 19, 2021 at 10:32 AM
Thank you so very much Heidi! I am so happy that the last line has a sense of freedom as our night angst disappears into the morning light. Couldn't resist bringing in the fresh joy of each morning - a new start every day. Sending you blessings of joy!
Dutta Avatar
October 18, 2021 at 10:13 PM
AMAZING! My vocabulary is too limited to admire your compositon. Simply BRILLIANT. Love.
Kauffman Avatar
October 19, 2021 at 10:27 AM
Anisha, thank you so much! This new form was both fun and a challenge to write - so many ways to go! I so appreciate your read and always love your your visits. Sending you blessings and love.
De Beaulieu Avatar
October 18, 2021 at 3:52 PM
Hello Sam Kauffman, this is wonderful. Hugs.
De Beaulieu Avatar
October 19, 2021 at 10:33 AM
Hello Sam, you did well with this form, I have enjoyed it. Hugs my friend.
Kauffman Avatar
October 18, 2021 at 4:19 PM
Thank you so much Darlene! This is such a unique new form. I enjoyed working with it! So happy you enjoyed it. Hugs.
Mcintosh Avatar
October 18, 2021 at 3:45 PM
Wonderful words that embrace the thoughts... beautiful. I sent you a soupmail. God bless you always sweet friend. Love, Gina
Kauffman Avatar
October 18, 2021 at 4:18 PM
Thank you so much. This Psalm verse has always been one of my favorites. Looking forward to breaking out of our eventide shrouds! Blessings and a hug dear friend!
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