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Night Dh

Magical moonbeams
Sparkling like silver
On an inky sea
I watch them dancing
Captivatingly

 
Bright mystic moon
Shining each night
Waxes and wanes
Controlling tides

Silver orb
Shines above
constantly

I love
A clear

Night

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1/21/19

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Line Gauthier

February 18, 2019 at 7:44 AM

Beautiful, Jan.

Jan Allison

February 19, 2019 at 7:33 AM

Thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

February 15, 2019 at 3:08 PM

Captivating imagery, Jan. Belated congratulations. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

February 17, 2019 at 12:24 PM

thanks so much Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Knowlton

February 14, 2019 at 2:03 PM

I like this poem very much Jan. Such good imagery. No need for the pic. Your poem describes it perfectly.

Jan Allison

February 14, 2019 at 3:25 PM

thanks so much Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Stephen Pennell

February 3, 2019 at 5:40 AM

this must have won great imaginary

Jan Allison

February 3, 2019 at 5:45 AM

Thanks Stephen:-) hugs Jan x

Darlene De Beaulieu

February 1, 2019 at 5:49 PM

Hello D.M. this is a lovely photo of the a moon setting into the water. Well it looks like it is setting into the water. Have a nice evening my friend.

Jan Allison

February 2, 2019 at 5:31 AM

Thanks so much Darlene:-) hugs Jan xx

Sunlite Wanter

February 1, 2019 at 9:37 AM

A painter could paint a picture from your words only. Congratulations!

Jan Allison

February 2, 2019 at 5:31 AM

Thanks so much Sunlite:-) hugs Jan xx

Valerie Staton

February 1, 2019 at 5:53 AM

Very picturesque!

Jan Allison

February 1, 2019 at 7:04 PM

thanks Valerie:-) hugs Jan xx

Old Buck

January 31, 2019 at 3:26 PM

Another great Jan Allison work. Thanks for sharing them all, with all of us on the soup. oldbuck

Jan Allison

February 1, 2019 at 3:03 AM

thanks so much OldBuck:-) hugs Jan xx

Beata Agustin

January 28, 2019 at 12:04 AM

Congrats! Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you!

Jan Allison

February 1, 2019 at 3:02 AM

thanks Beata:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

January 27, 2019 at 8:03 PM

Beautiful write Jan..Congrats on your win..

Jan Allison

February 1, 2019 at 3:02 AM

thanks Jospeh:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

January 27, 2019 at 3:18 PM

I just knew this one would do well!Big congrats, Jan.

Jan Allison

February 1, 2019 at 3:02 AM

thanks Andrea makes a change from my normal poop lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

January 27, 2019 at 9:20 AM

Hi Jan, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your 1st place win:-) Alexis

Jan Allison

February 1, 2019 at 3:01 AM

thanks Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx

Warren Doll

January 27, 2019 at 8:53 AM

Jan, back to congratulate you on your 1st place win. Warmest Wishes~ Warren

Jan Allison

February 1, 2019 at 3:01 AM

thanks warren:-) hugs Jan xx

Charles Messina

January 27, 2019 at 8:21 AM

I too love a clear night, and I too love this poem, Jan. Great imagery and beautifully written! Congratulations on your 1st place win! Hugs // Charlie xx

Jan Allison

February 1, 2019 at 3:01 AM

thanks for the contest prompt I have seldom written this form:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf

January 26, 2019 at 9:22 PM

Everything about this is wonderful, Jan! Beautiful imagery, lyrical lines, precise adherence to the form. Really, really, like it! :) gw

Jan Allison

February 1, 2019 at 3:00 AM

thanks my friend:-) hugs Jan xx

Warren Doll

January 25, 2019 at 11:23 AM

Brilliant poem and beautiful photograph. Jan. Warmest wishes~ Warren

Jan Allison

February 1, 2019 at 2:59 AM

thanks Warren:-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven

January 23, 2019 at 4:03 AM

Hi Jan, this is such an excellent write. This one reads so well, such beautiful imagery your words display on your canvas. Such a dreamy light. I do so enjoy looking upon moon and your words brought the moon to my vision so easily Jan. This reads like a winner to me. Have a wonderful Wednesday. Hugs....Mike. XX

Jan Allison

February 1, 2019 at 2:58 AM

thanks Mike:-) hugs Jan xx

Pat Adams

January 22, 2019 at 5:06 PM

Excellent example of the form. Very descriptive. We have a hot tub on our deck and love a clear night for the moon and stars (and Bud Copper).....Well done. No luck needed here to place!..........A FAV for me....pat

Jan Allison

February 1, 2019 at 2:57 AM

thanks Pat interesting new avatar lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

January 22, 2019 at 8:52 AM

WoW! Jan, You did an excellent job with this form! I enjoy watching the moon on a lovely night and I enjoyed this poem. I think you've penned yourself into the winners circle. Well done:-) Alexis

Jan Allison

February 1, 2019 at 2:57 AM

Thanks Alexis we often go for moonlight midnight walks:-) hugs Jan xx

Darlene De Beaulieu

January 21, 2019 at 5:44 PM

Hello Han, i love the clear sky, to see the stars and the full moon shine. Have a nice evening my friend.

Jan Allison

January 28, 2019 at 8:26 AM

I love a clear moonlight night too:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

January 21, 2019 at 5:08 PM

You did really well with this challenge, my friend. Your poem is so pretty.

Jan Allison

January 28, 2019 at 8:25 AM

Thanks so much Andrea I loved the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

January 21, 2019 at 11:55 AM

Well done! Too bad you weren't here last night to watch the Full Moon eclipse! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison

January 21, 2019 at 2:50 PM

I've seen pics on the web Rico I was tucked up in bed when the eclipse happened:-) hugs Jan xx

CayCay Godwin

January 21, 2019 at 9:48 AM

Superb, I truly love this. FAV. that leaves me with naught of more import to say other than, WOW, Jan. Love and thoughts ... CayCay

Jan Allison

January 21, 2019 at 9:57 AM

Thanks so much for the comment and fave:-) Hugs Jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire

January 21, 2019 at 9:05 AM

How splendidly you describe that awesome photo of the moon on the ocean, Jan. And the sea IS ever changing, ebbing and flowing through our lives. What can beat a clear night on the ocean or beach? The farther offshore you go, the more amazing are the images you describe so beautifully, Jan. Best wishes in the contest -- form looks perfect to me, but you left the contest name and sponsor off the bottom. Don't know if it's required. Sending winning wishes your way! Love, carolyn

Jan Allison

January 21, 2019 at 9:37 AM

Ooh thanks for the heads up I will put the contest details on, I really enjoyed the challenge, I love walking near the sea ion the promenade in the moonlight:-) hugs Jan xx