Vicki Acquah Poet Alliteration

Next Level

This waiting to get a year
older is not fun anymore ..
not worth the party
nor the cake
cannot dance long
looking  disheveled
i'd like to go to 
the next level
can't stand the
 knee swelling
and the teeny 
weeny dwellings
This waiting to see 
bad things happen 
to good people -
done got old.-
can't cry no more.. 
the end of fun.
the last days, 
at least for some.
the good die young.
This waiting  
now  minutes / hours
 the good get devoured
This waiting to get a year 
older is insane.
but I will remain. 
to die for a better cause

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David Williams May 12, 2014 at 5:12 PM Hi Vicky Hello, there is nothing wrong with your words per-se the problem is you have labelled it wrong, this is not alliteration and that in itself puts a lot of readers off from reading peoples work...also when anyone labels their work as 'I don't know' it is also a put off, .don't know if this is the answer you are seeking.....David Vicki Acquah November 21, 2015 at 9:21 PM basically i would like to know the form .. Vicki Acquah May 12, 2014 at 9:23 PM Thank you that maybe a problem .. I do not know every form I write so maybe i will just use the word ballad or free verse- I write from what i feel for people to Identify with the feeling ...I will study harder to learn forms , If it means that much as to the substance and tone .Thanks a lot that's helpful.