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Never To Return

in huff of gray clouds

a ravaged kite disappears

losing speed mid-air


a string tumbles down from sky…

my lover never returns


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Susan Burch's Tanka Contest
21 mar 12

Copyright © Nette Onclaud | Year Posted 2012

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Painted Hunter Date: 5/24/2012 11:27:00 AM Just awesome...everything fits and it's lovely! Login to Reply

Kim Merryman Date: 4/4/2012 1:52:00 PM Well done, Nette. Congrats on your 1st place win! Love, Kim Login to Reply

Black Eyed Susan Date: 4/4/2012 9:18:00 AM awesome tanka! love it! congrats on your win! fav :) Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 4/3/2012 10:16:00 PM Nette , Congratulations with your beautiful win, in B E Susan's contest.. Have yourself a good night. :-) , luv~PD Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 4/2/2012 3:40:00 PM You had me going there...kite lover! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love Login to Reply

Gwendolen Song Date: 4/2/2012 2:40:00 PM Symbolism extraordinaire, Nette! You wrote this so well! Congrats and a standing ovation....Miss reading your work...Gwendolen Login to Reply

Joyce Johnson Date: 4/2/2012 2:03:00 PM Congratulations on your win in this contest. Love, Joyce Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 4/2/2012 10:04:00 AM congrats Nette luv on a brilliant first place win for this lovely entry luv.. therapy today ..oh.. sweets.. Login to Reply

Deborah Burch Date: 4/2/2012 9:27:00 AM lol...Congratulations nette!!!! on your well deserved win!!big huggsss,love deb Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 4/2/2012 9:11:00 AM Congratulations on your well deserved win in Susan's contest Nette. Love, Carol Login to Reply

Joann Grisetti Date: 4/2/2012 8:53:00 AM Congratulations on your first place. Login to Reply

Sandy Ivy D Date: 3/29/2012 8:36:00 PM nice' Login to Reply

M.I.A . Date: 3/26/2012 8:34:00 PM very aptly describe. good luck on the contest nette Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 3/23/2012 2:07:00 PM Very creative and expressive work..Reads like a winner to me..Good luck in Susan's contest..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara Login to Reply

Debra Squyres Date: 3/22/2012 7:45:00 PM Awwwweeee !! So sad !!! Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 3/21/2012 10:30:00 PM A meaningful poem.. So much said here sweet lady-Charma Login to Reply

S.Jagathsimhan Nair Date: 3/21/2012 6:27:00 PM what a gem from u ,nette,..thnx for sharing this wonderful piece of real poetry, hugs, jag Login to Reply

Cory Long Date: 3/21/2012 6:17:00 PM awesome job on this gem cory Login to Reply

Russell Sivey Date: 3/21/2012 12:39:00 PM Wow what a powerful write. You wouldn't think it's so powerful when you first start to read this poem, but it grows and grows, then this culminating line is hurled, "my lover never returns" I just love it Nette! I love everything about your wonderful piece! I really enjoyed your write that I have read this afternoon! Great Work!! Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 3/21/2012 12:13:00 PM Yes.....HERE I AM ....nette....sweet hallo back... :) :) :) sad, that "your lover never will returns"... but well done, my friend! :) - oxox hugs Anne-Lise Login to Reply

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders Date: 3/21/2012 11:58:00 AM Great imagery, Nette, and terribly sad. A sure winner if this is for the tanka contest. Blessings, Rhonda Login to Reply

Kash Poet Date: 3/21/2012 11:57:00 AM This is so sad Nette.The kite lost in the cloud ,never to return....a wonderful use of netaphores to describe a lost love.Best wishes for the contest. Login to Reply

John Rhinem Date: 3/21/2012 11:36:00 AM Smile ~ ~~~ ~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~ ~ Always & Forever, John!:) * Login to Reply