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Never To Return

in huff of gray clouds

a ravaged kite disappears

losing speed mid-air


a string tumbles down from sky…

my lover never returns


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Susan Burch's Tanka Contest
21 mar 12

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Painted Hunter

May 24, 2012 at 11:27 AM

Just awesome...everything fits and it's lovely!

Kim Merryman

April 4, 2012 at 1:52 PM

Well done, Nette. Congrats on your 1st place win! Love, Kim

Black Eyed Susan

April 4, 2012 at 9:18 AM

awesome tanka! love it! congrats on your win! fav :)

Poet Destroyer A

April 3, 2012 at 10:16 PM

Nette , Congratulations with your beautiful win, in B E Susan's contest.. Have yourself a good night. :-) , luv~PD

Debbie Guzzi

April 2, 2012 at 3:40 PM

You had me going there...kite lover! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Gwendolen Song

April 2, 2012 at 2:40 PM

Symbolism extraordinaire, Nette! You wrote this so well! Congrats and a standing ovation....Miss reading your work...Gwendolen

Joyce Johnson

April 2, 2012 at 2:03 PM

Congratulations on your win in this contest. Love, Joyce

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

April 2, 2012 at 10:04 AM

congrats Nette luv on a brilliant first place win for this lovely entry luv.. therapy today ..oh.. sweets..

Deborah Burch

April 2, 2012 at 9:27 AM

lol...Congratulations nette!!!! on your well deserved win!!big huggsss,love deb

Carol Sunshine Brown

April 2, 2012 at 9:11 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved win in Susan's contest Nette. Love, Carol

Joann Grisetti

April 2, 2012 at 8:53 AM

Congratulations on your first place.

Sandy Ivy D

March 29, 2012 at 8:36 PM

nice'

M.I.A .

March 26, 2012 at 8:34 PM

very aptly describe. good luck on the contest nette

Sara Kendrick

March 23, 2012 at 2:07 PM

Very creative and expressive work..Reads like a winner to me..Good luck in Susan's contest..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara

Debra Squyres

March 22, 2012 at 7:45 PM

Awwwweeee !! So sad !!!

Charmaine Chircop

March 21, 2012 at 10:30 PM

A meaningful poem.. So much said here sweet lady-Charma

S.Jagathsimhan Nair

March 21, 2012 at 6:27 PM

what a gem from u ,nette,..thnx for sharing this wonderful piece of real poetry, hugs, jag

Cory Long

March 21, 2012 at 6:17 PM

awesome job on this gem cory

Russell Sivey

March 21, 2012 at 12:39 PM

Wow what a powerful write. You wouldn't think it's so powerful when you first start to read this poem, but it grows and grows, then this culminating line is hurled, "my lover never returns" I just love it Nette! I love everything about your wonderful piece! I really enjoyed your write that I have read this afternoon! Great Work!!

Anne-Lise Andresen

March 21, 2012 at 12:13 PM

Yes.....HERE I AM ....nette....sweet hallo back... :) :) :) sad, that "your lover never will returns"... but well done, my friend! :) - oxox hugs Anne-Lise

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

March 21, 2012 at 11:58 AM

Great imagery, Nette, and terribly sad. A sure winner if this is for the tanka contest. Blessings, Rhonda

Kash Poet

March 21, 2012 at 11:57 AM

This is so sad Nette.The kite lost in the cloud ,never to return....a wonderful use of netaphores to describe a lost love.Best wishes for the contest.