Brenda Chiri Poet Free verse

Never Seeing the Truth

The electricity between us 
was spontaneous
Which did intrigue me 
because I never thought it tangible....
Others would patronize me 
for this love happened so fast
Only until some had a revelation did they 
see our love was true 
Others had a fixation and
if they didn't navigate 
through these thoughts in 
the right way they were 
destined to fall into a portal  
of denial never seeing the truth

Sponsor:John Hamilton 
Contest: 8 word challenge 
Date:1/26/2020

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Krish Radhakrishna February 6, 2020 at 4:09 PM Beautiful work! Congrats on your win!! Brenda Chiri February 6, 2020 at 8:01 PM Thank you!;)

Anisha Dutta February 4, 2020 at 11:11 PM Tough Challenge. All the best. Brenda Chiri February 5, 2020 at 8:38 AM Thank you Anisha yes it was a tough challenge;)

Kim Rodrigues February 1, 2020 at 3:31 PM Nicely done, Brenda! Congrats! Brenda Chiri February 1, 2020 at 5:35 PM Thank you so much Kim!;)

Debjani Mitra February 1, 2020 at 10:10 AM Wow, you created a masterpiece ..So spontaneously the words have been weaved into a great write Brenda Chiri February 1, 2020 at 1:32 PM Thank you so very much!;)

John Hamilton January 31, 2020 at 12:34 PM This is a special write Brenda, outstanding how you used the eight words in such a succinct way, not detracting at all from the beauty and brevity of this write. Congrats on another fine win! Brenda Chiri January 31, 2020 at 12:40 PM John thank you so very much!;) much appreciated!;)

John Fleming January 30, 2020 at 8:55 AM Another contest entry -- and a very good one at that! I have to agree with Lu Loo, Brenda...I too think John will very much appreciate the poem also. In much affection. :) john P.s Good luck with your excellent efforts! Brenda Chiri January 30, 2020 at 7:08 PM Thank you for your continued support John! I will always appreciate your comments! Much affection!;)

Swetha Vangaveti January 29, 2020 at 6:23 AM Brilliance at its peaks!! Congratulations Brenda. Brenda Chiri January 29, 2020 at 10:33 AM Thank you Swetha!;)

Jennifer Proxenos January 29, 2020 at 1:34 AM This is an amazing entry for this contest Brenda I would imagine this is a sure win, the last two lines say it all. Well penned my friend, Blessings Brenda Chiri January 29, 2020 at 10:33 AM Thank you Jennifer I appreciate that!;)

Beautiful Scars January 27, 2020 at 8:53 AM wow great usage of all 8 words lovely Brenda! John will love this, good luck x:-) Brenda Chiri January 27, 2020 at 9:08 AM Haha thx Laura! I really appreciate your visit!;)

Paul Callus January 27, 2020 at 6:13 AM Incorporating prompt words in a poem has never been my forte, Brenda, but you have accomplished that with apparent ease! Well done! ~ Warm regards // paul Brenda Chiri January 27, 2020 at 7:49 AM Lol Paul thank you so much! You have been a good friend!;)

Beata Agustin January 26, 2020 at 11:29 PM Wow! Thanks for sharing this with your poetic words: "destined to fall into a portal of denial never seeing the truth..." God bless you. Thanks likewise for your comments for my poems. Brenda Chiri January 26, 2020 at 11:36 PM Thank you so much!;)