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Never Seeing the Truth

The electricity between us 
was spontaneous
Which did intrigue me 
because I never thought it tangible....
Others would patronize me 
for this love happened so fast
Only until some had a revelation did they 
see our love was true 
Others had a fixation and
if they didn't navigate 
through these thoughts in 
the right way they were 
destined to fall into a portal  
of denial never seeing the truth

Sponsor:John Hamilton 
Contest: 8 word challenge 
Date:1/26/2020

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Krish Radhakrishna Date: 2/6/2020 4:09:00 PM Beautiful work! Congrats on your win!! Login to Reply Brenda Chiri Date: 2/6/2020 8:01:00 PM Thank you!;)

Anisha Dutta Date: 2/4/2020 11:11:00 PM Tough Challenge. All the best. Login to Reply Brenda Chiri Date: 2/5/2020 8:38:00 AM Thank you Anisha yes it was a tough challenge;)

Kim Rodrigues Date: 2/1/2020 3:31:00 PM Nicely done, Brenda! Congrats! Login to Reply Brenda Chiri Date: 2/1/2020 5:35:00 PM Thank you so much Kim!;)

Debjani Mitra Date: 2/1/2020 10:10:00 AM Wow, you created a masterpiece ..So spontaneously the words have been weaved into a great write Login to Reply Brenda Chiri Date: 2/1/2020 1:32:00 PM Thank you so very much!;)

John Hamilton Date: 1/31/2020 12:34:00 PM This is a special write Brenda, outstanding how you used the eight words in such a succinct way, not detracting at all from the beauty and brevity of this write. Congrats on another fine win! Login to Reply Brenda Chiri Date: 1/31/2020 12:40:00 PM John thank you so very much!;) much appreciated!;)

John Fleming Date: 1/30/2020 8:55:00 AM Another contest entry -- and a very good one at that! I have to agree with Lu Loo, Brenda...I too think John will very much appreciate the poem also. In much affection. :) john P.s Good luck with your excellent efforts! Login to Reply Brenda Chiri Date: 1/30/2020 7:08:00 PM Thank you for your continued support John! I will always appreciate your comments! Much affection!;)

Swetha Vangaveti Date: 1/29/2020 6:23:00 AM Brilliance at its peaks!! Congratulations Brenda. Login to Reply Brenda Chiri Date: 1/29/2020 10:33:00 AM Thank you Swetha!;)

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 1/29/2020 1:34:00 AM This is an amazing entry for this contest Brenda I would imagine this is a sure win, the last two lines say it all. Well penned my friend, Blessings Login to Reply Brenda Chiri Date: 1/29/2020 10:33:00 AM Thank you Jennifer I appreciate that!;)

Beautiful Scars Date: 1/27/2020 8:53:00 AM wow great usage of all 8 words lovely Brenda! John will love this, good luck x:-) Login to Reply Brenda Chiri Date: 1/27/2020 9:08:00 AM Haha thx Laura! I really appreciate your visit!;)

Paul Callus Date: 1/27/2020 6:13:00 AM Incorporating prompt words in a poem has never been my forte, Brenda, but you have accomplished that with apparent ease! Well done! ~ Warm regards // paul Login to Reply Brenda Chiri Date: 1/27/2020 7:49:00 AM Lol Paul thank you so much! You have been a good friend!;)

Beata Agustin Date: 1/26/2020 11:29:00 PM Wow! Thanks for sharing this with your poetic words: "destined to fall into a portal of denial never seeing the truth..." God bless you. Thanks likewise for your comments for my poems. Login to Reply Brenda Chiri Date: 1/26/2020 11:36:00 PM Thank you so much!;)